I'll Keep You

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I'll Keep You

Dreaming of the good old times
I saw the world in black and white
Felt the vibes around myself
Slowly coming back
Thinking about yesterday
When I was still far away
Where there were no hates or worries
You were there with me

James, when you laugh
My whole being feels alive
James, when you cry
I feel your tears running down my face
James, mate, I'll keep you

I remember it quite well too
When we always make it through
We could make the sun go around
Just by walking away
Playing like we use to play
Our kingdom of sand and clay
Though we lost our treasure chest
We can live without it

James, when you laugh
My whole being feels alive
James, when you cry
I feel your tears running down my face
James, mate, I'll keep you

I know that you know it's true
I would have never made it here
I would have felt heaven fall
Without you being me

James, when you laugh
My whole being feels alive
James, when you cry
I feel your tears running down my face
James, mate, I'll keep you




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Crap!

I couldn't see anything wrong with this...darn you! come on...not even one mistake...crap! Well, this was really good. You are a good lyricsts...is that a word? anyway, you can write really good lyrics. Great job on no mistakes.

BBB
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Would love help on this.



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