Doodlebug

**A completely random drabble about a weird thought I had...

Doodlebug- Plus-One

Louis glared down at the ink caterpillar that he'd sketched on his paper, the caterpillar stared back.

Despite eating half of Louis' work, the caterpillar seemed defiant, and continued to insist that it hadn't done anything wrong. This wasn't the first time something like this had happened; Henry seemed to like the taste of differential equations. This wouldn't normally have been considered a bad thing for Louis, but seeing as he was in the middle of a test, he figured that he was in trouble.

"10 minutes remaining."

Louis glared once more at the caterpillar as if hoping it might regurgitate the knowledge back onto the paper, instead it pounced straight onto the second half of the solutions, and munched it's way through the numbers and algebra.

As soon as the last 'x' had been safely consumed, Henry turned to meet Louis' eyes once more, and let out a satisfied burp.

Louis was flabbergasted, Henry had been one of his favourite doodles, he let him out often enough, even played with him during R.E. every week without fail.

He lurched for the ink eraser and released the lid, harshly erasing the outline, ignoring the caterpillar's pleas.

"Put your pens down, and make sure your name is on the paper..."

Louis' head slammed down on the top of the desk, causing classmates to turn and investigate.

"Looks like another fail for you Louis," the teacher grumbled. "Not even bothering to try any of the questions. I'll be seeing you in my detention tomorrow..."

Louis groaned, three weeks in a row, and he'd really tried to avoid it this week.

"...and you better have a good excuse for wasting my time."

Louis' face grew paler. How on earth could he explain that a grumpy caterpillar had devoured his solutions without sounding insane?

He grabbed his bag and nodded glumly as he left the classroom.

Very funny!

Louis glared down at the ink caterpillar that he'd sketched on his notes; the caterpillar stared back.

I'd nix the semi colon and make it all one sentence.

Despite eating half of louis classwork, the caterpillar seemed defiant, and continued to insist that it hadn't done anything wrong.

louis = Louis'

This wasn't the first time something like this had happened;, Henry seemed to like the taste of differential equations.

Nix these and make this two sentences.

"10 minutes remaining."

Write the number. 10 = ten

Louis glared once more at the caterpillar as if hoping it might regurgetate the knowledge back onto the paper, instead it pounced straight onto the second half of the solutions, and munched it's way through the numbers and algebra.

Regurgetate = regurgitate.

It's = its.

This is very long. Start a new sentence with "Instead it pounced..."

As soon as the last 'x' had been safely consumed, Henry turned to meet Louis' eyes once more, and let out a satisfactory burp.

But maybe "satisfied" instead of "satisfactory"?

Louis was flabbergasted, Henry had been one of his favourite doodles, he let him out often enough, even played with him during R.E. every week without fail.

Full stop instead of comma.

"Put your pen's down, and make sure your name is on the paper..."

Pen's = pens

"Looks like another fail for you Louis," the teacher grumbled, "Not even bothering to try any of the questions, I'll be seeing you in my detention tomorrow..."

Full stop instead of a comma, both times.

Louis groaned, three weeks in a row, and he'd really tried to avoid it this week.

Start a new sentence here.

Louis face grew paler, how on earch could he explain that a grumpy caterpillar had devoured his solutions without sounding insane?

Start a new sentence here.

He grabbed his bag, and nodded glumly as he left the classroom.

Nix the comma.

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That aside, it was very good! I like the way you chose the title... double meanings and all. Just fix those typos and try to avoid using commas to much.

Sometimes I wonder if I'm awake when I write...looking at some of them errors! xD