Prologue for [nameless]

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You could, but if it's kind of long and not really related (in the sense that it's a new scene separate from this one) then a new thread will do. =P It's simpler then people know it's there. If you add it to this thread they won't unless you tell them. ^_^
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To be honest with ya Ayra I see this more as a poem. I recommend you actually make it into a poem. You ever tried poetry if not, you should try change this into a poem. Can't say much more but awesome! XD

Good luck
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Hmm...

I liked this. It was engaging and well-written, and all the descriptions seemed to fit.

My one comment is the way you use lots of short sentences, such as this one:

The air was hot and heavy with sin.


A bit telly as well...... ;)

Other than that, this was really good!


I'd like to read more of it.... The problem is that you have so many untitled thingies in your portfolio I can't find anything. :lol:

See ya around!


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Thanks, lupis! :D

Actually, I do have more posted. It's the 'NN -- Prologue' in my portfolio. XD It's the complete prologue, this and another longer bit.

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