Inferno (13+)

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I know I haven't been active in the literary forums for quite a while so after this I am going to make some comments :) This is just a poem I wrote a minute ago about how I'm feeling right now.

I don’t think I can write
Right now
Without burning the paper.
Because I’m scared and bored and waiting
And I can’t seem to
Think
Without thinking of him
I’m burning and tired and wiped out
Restless and useless and
Fucking about
I have something I need to say
And until I say it
I’m speechless.
Matt.




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It was pretty good.
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Me like. Me like. The perfect frustration poem. Though I am rather curious about who "him" is.
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I like this alot. I can't really find anything that I would change about it.
The robbed that smiles, steals something from the thief. ~William Shakespeare, Othello
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The capitalization in front of every line bugged me, but that's your style. The poem itself was hurried, yet that sets the mood of the poem. I liked it.




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I'm definitely not a poet, but I liked it too. It felt frustrated.
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I liked it alot, to. The perfect " i have writers block" peom.

Because I’m scared and bored and waiting

I don't think you need the "because" there. Other than that the poem was pretty good. Keep on writing in the free world.



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