what do you say?

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what do you say?


If someone asked you
what do you believe in?
what do you say?

You say:
I believe In everything and nothing
in god & Allah, in fairies & unicorns
in Buddha & Ra
in all of this and more.

If someone says “help”
what do you say?

You say:
what, do you need a buck or two?
A place to live for a time?
I’ll always be here to lend you a hand.

When you need some time away
what do you say?

You say:
leave me alone and let me be
I need some time and space
between you and me.
Last edited by selenasacuna on Sun Dec 09, 2007 5:35 pm, edited 1 time in total.




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I liked it, it's good! I'm no poetry expert, but I think the start of every line should be capitalized? I dunno for sure.



what do you need, a buck or two?


I think a comma should go there...or

what , do you need a buck or two?

Otherwise it's a bit confusing =)


Also 'God' should be capitalized, no? =)



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