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This is a really creative, albiet a bit strange, piece. The finishing statement was haunting, just how I like it. One of the kind of lines I like to read over and over again just to here its coolness and ... cleverness ... and what not ...

But really, this was good. Well done.




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why did the guy die?! :(




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this has a really cool dreamy read to it. Like random thoughts, and definitely shows the confusion of the narrator.
Nate wrote:And if YWS ever does become a company, Jack will be the President of European Operations. In fact, I'm just going to call him that anyways.




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Part of me wants to jump and shout, ‘help! Help him!’ while the other protests, see what happens. It turns out, I follow the latter.


I think you should have "see what happens" in quotes, because I kind of got confused.

But otherwise--this was absolutely amazing. Just...amazing.




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I'm here Sam!! sorry it took so long *pants from lack of oxygon* anyway this was a very good peice, very dreamy like everyone else said. But I think him seeing the gagged person happend a little to soon for me. Like something else should happen before that. And like RiaBaby said you should have "see what happens" in qoutes.




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Wow, this is great! I agree with ohhewwo, the last line is great. Clever, definitely, and makes you wish there was just one more line in there. I also agree with Jack, The way you have written shows the readers confusion, and it reminds me of a character i read in a book once. Just the style of the authors, though; the randomness. Anyway, you and that author have another thing in common. You're both great. :wink:




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These are so good, Sam. You should put them all in one place with little ~*~ dealywops separating them or something. It'd be cool to read them all at once...they're awesome.
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I'm so lost in all these!

It is good. That ending is haunting. KEEP IT UP, BUDDY, WE'VE GOT A LONG NIGHT AHEAD OF US!
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I SHALL!

AND WHY ARE WE WHISPERING?!?!

Oh, btw, a couple posts back I had a complete list of links to these things...*shrug* i get lost trying to copy it all into Word! BLAHEMA!
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