The Accursed Forest

Night. Its dark, cold and I have only the moon and the stars to giude me. The beating of my heart and the steady, rhythmic beat of my footsteps are the only things to break what seems like an eternity of silence.

I reach the entrance to the forest and stop only to bring out the torch from my backpack. The light from the torch is weak but must do since the ever-glaring moon and stars will be hidden by the monstrous trees.

My pace slows as I enter the accursed forest. No need to run. My journey is almost at an end.

Well, your ideas and descriptions are nice, but there's nothing here for me to critique! Not enough meat to sink my teeth into. The first thing on your to-do list with this is to expand. That's my only real complaint with this, because I can tell from your imagery that you're a good writer.

Make this longer! Where's the plot? I like plot, it's tasty and I'm hungry. :p

-St. Razorblade
The Official YWS Pirate

Oh, and welcome aboard YWS! I can see you just recently became active.

Yea good point
Thanks for the comment you are right im not even sure if this is the beginning of the story or the ending its just an idea that came to my head.