vamps and werewolves

Ok this is like the first thing i have posted, it's a story book, and basically u have 3 choices to be a vampire,a were wolf,or my persanol favorite the hybrid

vampires have sertain traits:
-live longer lives
-can sence vamps.,werewolves,and hybrids
-you must feed once every 24 hours or you will begin to die
-have enhanced strength
-the sun will burn you
-crosses,holy water, and stakes do not work they only make you more mad
-it takes 5 were wolves to take down a vampire and 1 hybrid to take down a regular vampire

Werewolves have more traits:
-you turn when you are under pressure,upset,angry,sad, and when your adrenalin levels are higher
-you can access 1 of the traigts when you are calm
-stay calm unlease under extreme pressure(or they could hurts 1s that they love)
-live longer and have to have a date as of when they were turned
-some of the traits are:faster running while in the mortal form, are stronger than the top most athletes could move a train up a hill with then flick of a finger(medaphically)
silver will not hurt you

hybrids have more traits and are more complicated
-must be born a vampire and turned by a werewolf bite(if you are attacked chances are you will become a hybrid
-sun light doesnt affect you
-increased speed(not to the same extent as the werewolves though)
-must feed once ever 48 hours
-if you transform into the werewolf stage you have 12 hours befor you must feed because of the amount of energy it uses
-it takes 5 vampires to kill you
-10 werewolves to kill you

here are the real rules:
1.you maynot contol other characters
2.no more than 5 characters per account
3.try to have fun
4.if you do not find a group you will be removed
a hybrid can join either group
5.do not make fun of others
6.there are bars around that cell bottles bloodmixed with a little bit of wine(so you dont have to kill for blood)
7.no weapons other than crow bars and baseball bats(alluminum or wood it dont mater,but alluminum does more dammage)

well have fun, and if you think i left something out please tell me XD

name:Blaaken

Age: 250 years old

race: hybrid

date turned: 1851

description:Long silver hair,6'11" tall, peril white beard and sky blue eyes

name:Serra

Age: 19

race: Hybrid

date turned: (What year is it???)

description: Long black hair, sharp green eyes, tan skin, athletic form, BUT she was were then bit by a vampire (That's allowed right) she sticks with her were family.

"Time to feed" I say as I start to run "I feel a bit hungry, I miss being just a vampire, but the upside to things are now I'm twice as strong, but they say I only have to feed every 48 hours but I seem to always be hungry, I'm just not used to this." I finish saying as i walk into the bar. "It's been a while since I last sayw a werew..." i jerk my head to the left to see a werewolf in human form,

"I knew I smelled a hybrid, the fool that attacked you was a retard all he did was make you stronger" I watch the dog walk towards me. I watch him make a fist and punch me.

"Did you have to do that?" i say as i stand up "leave this bar before I hurt you" I say as I start the first faze of changing to hybrid form.

"No, if your a little baby then dont fight and die..." he said just before I lung at him and threw him through the wall, breaking his right arm which he hit me with.

"Next time take some time to remember that hybrids are stronger than you dogs," I say as he stands up."go back to your pathetic race"i say.


Suddenly his pupils turn into slits,his back arches and his arms grow fur. "Your going down hybrid!" he says as he jumps at me. I grab his snout and run his head into the floor boards, suddenly I pull up grab his jaw and top of the snout and break the joint to pieces by putting his jaw on his chest. I watch as he howls in pain "You are going to die i will sick every last werewolf in this god forsaken city upon you!!!" Just as he finishes his last word i thrust my claws into his chest calapsing a lung and puncturing his heart, he calapses into a bloody heap upon the floor.

omg.
blaaken, how iliterate can you get? Capitalize your i's, for goodness sake! Your story ideas are interesting but I feel an almost physical aversion to people who can't even be bothered to write a proper sentence.

(What she said )

Serra watched the other Hybrid kill a werewolf.

"Are you stupid?" She demanded sitting in the booth next to him ordering a bottle.

"Excuse me?" He looked at her with a snarl on his face.

"That was Bren, he is up high with the weres." She said not looking at him as she sipped her drink.

Ayra wrote:omg.
blaaken, how iliterate can you get? Capitalize your i's, for goodness sake! Your story ideas are interesting but I feel an almost physical aversion to people who can't even be bothered to write a proper sentence.

if I were to take the time to fix all of the mistakes that I made I think I would mentally scar myself and also I was just goin fast, I think it was prettuy well done except for the errors. to me it looks good but i dont write much because if im put under a time limit i basically get writer's block

Yeah, but seriously! You made about 10 spelling/grammatical errors in just that post. Is it really that hard to use capitals at the beginning of a sentence? And you didn't use a period for that last phrase. I don't want to be bossy but please, please try to be literate.

(I agree with Ayra. If you're going to start a storybook, try and be a little more literate.)

name: Adrianne (goes by Adri)

Age: 18

race: werewolf (to add diversity! XD)

date turned: only six months ago

description: Human form: 5'10", slender but muscular, long blonde hair, blue-gray eyes; Wolf form: about 200 pounds, reddish fur

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Adri

A new scent brought my attention off the trail. I halted, annoyed by what little progress I had made thus far, only to be distracted again. But this scent disturbed me...

Blood. But not just blood, werewolf blood, Bren's blood...

I snarled and broke into a run. Even in human form, I was too fast for my own good. I was out of the forest and dashing across a busy street, into the bar, before I realized it. And there, one the floor of the bar, his body broken and bleeding, lifeless...was Bren.

"Bren..." I breathed. It felt as if everything else had stopped.

"i might be stupid" I said after i took a drink "but if a werewolf messes with me and I will kill it it would take 10 of them to kill me. If I didnt they would prolly think i am afraid,so if i dont fight back he would have actually given me a scratch, but since he tried to fight i killed him" i said with a smirk

Name: Arya

Age: 18

Race: Hybrid

Date turned: two months ago

Description: 5' 6", small frame, but very strong, short brown hair, hazel eyes. Wolf: sliver hair.

(Ah, a novice writer! Welcome to YWS and this storybook!)

(Lol thanks. Actually, I used to be writergirl007...,so tecnically, I'm not new...XD)

Arya rolled her eyes.

"That was just stupid! Even if we are stronger, we shouldn't exert ourselfs and lord it over others." She glared at this...this animal in front of her.

"I might be new at this, but at least I'm not a complete idiot!" She sighed. "Men, what are you going to do? They always have to promve themselves, which makes them all idiots."

She walked out into the night, searching for signs of approaching weres.

Adri

I felt the growl growing in my chest, building and escaping as it reached my throat. They will pay! I began to shake in my rage...

No, Adri. Calm down... I had to close my eyes to be able to focus. If I lost my temper here, more people would die...Don't lose control. Don't lose control. I stared at my fallen comrad's body and supressed a shudder. The least I could do for him now was respect his death by burying him and mourning him with my brothers and sisters.

I knelt to pick up the bloody body.

Serra glared at him. "Your kidding right, your bringing trouble on to the rest of us hybrids." She snapped, when she saw Adri she walked over and helped carry the body out. She had only met Adri once and not on good terms but Bren had been a friend and there was no way she was going to let her differences with this girl get in the way of burrying him.