It was originally called Boutai, after one f the characters who isnt main, but is the most powerful, and who shows up late in the story, but then i changed it to Kasai Tora (Flame Tiger) the names ging to ft into the story. This isnt the beggining, this is just the first part i drew, enjoy.
Cut my wrists, close me eyes, stab my heart, say your goodbyes X
Here i am, standing there, seeing you in all my prayers.
Take my hand, we'll run away, i love you is all ill say.
I like the detail of the front frames, the class room. The eye on the left frame in the middle is very odd, too many specs I think. The right frame in the same row...other than the eye and the words (sentance=sentence) I really can't make out the drawing in it? I would like to see a face in the right bottom frame. But, I like the idea. Maybe add some color.
For box 3, you spelled "sentence" as "sentance", so...thought i'd correct you there...
also, PLEASE number this according to order, as i'm not really sure exactly what's going on.
The important part, the art in itself, is great. congrats!
~Deoris
'"Many years ago, when I was young, I saw a fire, and what looked like death-- and beyond that, in the dark places, something...or some One, who knew me. Shall I at last find my way back to that wonderworld of Night?"'
I think these are generally well drawn but I agree with Via - the right one in the middle row is very hard to make out. Some colour would help there or a little shading if you'd rather keep it black and white. Also, try to keep your speech bubbles and writing neat so it doesn't distract the viewer too much. Generally the people are nice though and I like the bookshelf.
Ah I liked this. Traditional manga from right to left; that's the best part.
I liked how you drew the characters although there wasn't really much plot to the page, I think that has already been said though. It's not too bad though, mind.
