My Angel

i knocked this together in about 20minutes a few months ago
i like it i suppose, what do you guys think?

I had a vision and the walls were falling,
In a small room with no light and no air.
Im being tortured for everything i havent done wrong,
So like millions before me i felt the life was leaving,
Only for the foundations to crumble and an angel saved me.
She took me to a place that only shattered when i hit the ground,
At a million miles an hour my body was broken.
I was left to rot like those six feet under,
Above me a legacy of what i hadnt acheived.
In my pit i sat I tried to remember ,
The last person i saw, the last thing i said.
That name. i love you. I only wish i meant it,
So i sat up and counted all the stars in the sky,
Its never so romantic when theres clouds about.
The fact im alive is a miracle, i must be a God,
or maybe it was all just a dream.

I like how mysterious it is, I'm a little confused on the symbolism....But I think that it has a kinda repentance to the narrator, like he's been tortured by some sin and now he's forgiven, that was my take on it.

Yes, it is rather vague, rather cliched, and not wholly original... I do like the beginning and I think you have a good thing going--it just takes more than twenty minutes and probably more thought-process than a "knocking" together.

Best of luck,
-Evang.