SuperBoy Chapter 3

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Chapter Three

Meanwhile, when any one least expected it an experiment was going on in Denver, Colorado. Doctor Stevens a blond who was constantly compared to a certain ABC television character was at work with her partner. Now the other Doctor Stevens was her husband a very powerful man with lots of money.
He worked under cover for the US government for twenty-five years and it only took ten minutes after meeting Superman that he decided what he had to do. Now Kragen-Peter Stevens couldn't stop all Kryptonite from being destroyed, but he secretly studied them enough to know what they were made of. He'd started the secret project fifteen years ago, and he'd been married for five. Now, here he was, with his lovely wife, one ingredient way from success. Success he felt he deserved and spent a lifetime to get.
"Kragen are you ready?"
"I was born ready." He added the last ingredient.
In an instant the cubed experimentation glass made loud blasting nose lighting up the entire lab and causing both the doctor and his wife to fall to the ground from all the force.
They quickly got to their feet to observe the experiment, when the substance stopped glowing one lonely tear came down on Kragen's left cheek, "Finally I've made Lithonite!"
He looked at his wife Olivia and they couldn't stop laughing. They hugged each other jumped about like they were teenagers in a mosh pit. Meanwhile the computer screen read, "Experiment Success."
***

Two hours later after a little champagne, the Stevens went to their under ground place to meet with their associates. It was hard to get to and Doctor Stevens had a voice identifier and a sequence of tunnels to travel before he reached the Spot. There in the Spot their associates waited there patiently for when Mr. And Mrs. Stevens until they walked in the room.
The room was dark and there was a long black table in the middle of it where each of the associate sat. Axel, a bald associate who was a hot head stood up, "Did every thing go according to plan sir?"
"Do you think my wife would wear a thousand dollar cocktail dress otherwise? "
Axel smiled, "No, sir."
"Good, you got the chopper?" Axel got a remote from of the table and pushed a button that allowed a screen to come out the ceiling. On the screen was a GPS showing the arrival of the chopper.
"Yes, sir."
Doctor Kragen and his wife sat on the table patiently getting comfortable and sipping martinis.
"Hey, Beagle, did you make arrangements in the city?"
Doctor Stevens was talking to a small man, who was thin with small beagle eyes, who also had a tendency to be constantly scared, "Uh-uh, yes sir yes." He continued staying the same thing over and over again but no one paid attention.
"Good, Levy that's it for phase one; prepare for phase two ."
That night there was a merry party on the Kragen Helicopter. When Kragen got to Metropolis he wanted to see one man, the one man who would make him invisible.




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SASSYLADY333 wrote:Chapter Three

Meanwhile, when [s]any[/s]every one least expected it, an experiment was going on in Denver, Colorado. Doctor Stevens a blond who was constantly compared to a certain ABC television character was at work with her partner. Now the other Doctor Stevens was her husband a very powerful man with lots of money.

He worked under cover for the US government for twenty-five years and it only took ten minutes after meeting Superman that he decided what he had to do. Now Kragen-Peter Stevens couldn't stop all Kryptonite from being destroyed, but he secretly studied them enough to know what they were made of. He'd started the secret project fifteen years ago, and he'd been married for five. Now, here he was, with his lovely wife, one ingredient away from the success[s]. Success[/s] he felt he deserved and spent a lifetime to get.

"Kragen are you ready?"
"I was born ready." He added the last ingredient.
In an instant the cubed experimentation glass made a loud blasting nose, lighting up the entire lab and causing both the doctor and his wife to fall to the ground from [s]all[/s] the force.

They quickly got to their feet to observe the experiment, when the substance stopped glowing one lonely tear came down [s]on[/s] Kragen's left cheek, "Finally I've made Lithonite!"

He looked at his wife Olivia and they couldn't stop laughing. They hugged each other jumped about like they were teenagers in a mosh pit. Meanwhile the computer screen read, "Experiment Success."
***

Two hours later after a little champagne, the Stevens went to their under ground place to meet with their associates. It was hard to get to and Doctor Stevens had a voice identifier and a sequence of tunnels to travel before he reached the Spot. There in the Spot their associates waited [s]there[/s] patiently for when Mr. And Mrs. Stevens until they walked in the room.

That was a little confusing, all the spot and place talk makes it hard to follow. Be a llittle more exact in your description

The room was dark and there was a long black table in the middle of it where each of the associate sat. Axel, a bald associate who was a hot head stood up, "Did every thing go according to plan sir?"
"Do you think my wife would wear a thousand dollar cocktail dress otherwise? "
Axel smiled, "No, sir."
"Good, you got the chopper?" Axel got a remote from of the table and pushed a button that allowed a screen to come out the ceiling. On the screen was a GPS showing the arrival of the chopper.
"Yes, sir."
Doctor Kragen and his wife sat on the table patiently getting comfortable and sipping martinis.
"Hey, Beagle, did you make arrangements in the city?"
Doctor Stevens was talking to a small man, who was thin with small beagle eyes, who also had a tendency to be constantly scared, "Uh-uh, yes sir yes." He continued staying the same thing over and over again but no one paid attention.
"Good, Levy that's it for phase one; prepare for phase two ."
That night there was a merry party on the Kragen Helicopter. When Kragen got to Metropolis he wanted to see one man, the one man who would make him invisible.


It is very interesting. A little info-dumpy, but I like the Use of the DC comic setting. I suggest working on your showing versus your telling. It'll help the story flow better and keep the reader's interest.
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