Cures for a broken soul

If I laugh myself to sleep,
you'd ask if I was alright.
If I wake up, I'm already in a fight.

Something is wrong,
somethings are gone.
Something is lost.

I felt wierd, you knew I held you dear.
I feel like I'm dying,
burning inside me.

You tell me I'm lying,
you think that I'm hiding.
I think you knew.

Something is wrong,
somethings are gone.
Something is..... lost

Simple, but I think you could have gone somewhere more with it if it didn't seem so, I don't want to say cosnstricted, but cut off by the rhyme scheme?

I mean Rhyme scheme can work, but it seems like their were things that could be have been...not explained but elaborated on? I hate telling people to change things in poetry because that's how they felt it and it was written that way...but it's like...I don't know, I enjoyed it for what it was though

I liked this poem, and I it was a little broad but over all the reader gets the message. .

It was simple and nice.it was kind of straight forward,so you can get the message easily.

Keep writing and posting!

~Shine~