Who

Who is that half-assed lazy girl
Walking down the hallway
Walking over my friends and I
My life?
Who is that scrawny bitch
That looks underfed and has fake horse tail hair
With that two timing smile
With the ego that shouldn't be there?
Who is this naive little fool
That just turned twelve
And might as well be dead because
We are all better off without her near
Around us, talking about us
Why won't she leave me alone?
Why won't she just leave us all alone?

I see. Not too bad, this doesn't appeal to me though, lets see what everyone else thinks.

I thought this was really good. Good description and emotion.

WHA nobody else posted on this, why doesn't any of the people who know my check this out? CHECK IT OUT!!!

First off...THREAD BUMP! Sheesh, thread bumps piss me off. I'm only going to actually reply to this because I think someone needs too...Bitch much? That's all I get from this. Too short to handle more than one cuss word, too blunt to really put out the emotion I think you want, and too personal adding a name at the end there after not putting it in the poem. In other words; high school drama that has no place here.

And might as well be dead because
We are all better off without her near
Around us, talking about us
Why won't she leave me alone?
Why won't shw just leave us all alone?

---Dedicated to Eunice, because I hate you with every whim in my sanity---

It was great until that^. It would have been nice if you just left us wondering who the person was. I liked it until you started talking about "her." It just made it a little impersonal and an uncomfortable read. Perhaps you should alter the end...and put who it was dedicated to...somewhere else.

Well someone's pissy...nah I'm just kidding, I feel the same way about people. I don't agree with the person that said that the dedication was bad, I think it's awesome. It shows that you have a major hatred for that person.

I'm with Morgan on the dedication...

This was definately emothional, but I think you could put more into it. We all know the one person at school we would just like to strangle, but what makes her unique?

underfed and fake horse tail hair.. such a great image.

Unique? her family that's what. Her mom wanted to be an accountant but she got the age of Eunice incorrect by a year which is why she just turned 12 in the 7th grade....

man, fuck this, fuck you, fuck anger. Mark Twain once said, "wisdom is the reward one gives themself for a lifetime of listening when they would rather have talked." I've been angry, and everyone has, and it's ugly. Randomly spouting it off doesn't exactly "make" it for us. The thing with Twain applies because once, I was angry at my parents and yelled at them (getting myself grounded, o' course) and then, I saw in my notebook, that two weeks earlier, I had written the truism, "Anger is only and always for the stupid." I had to catch my breath, because I had caught myself being incredibly stupid. Please catch yourself, and cool your jets. There is NEVER an excuse to be angry.

Then there is none for you to be angry at me then is there?

man, fuck this, fuck you, fuck anger.

I mean seriously if you didn't like it you just had to say so. You could have said.

TBR I didnt like this and I dont' like anger. That is my reason.

But fuck me? seriously, you need to look and relook that over.

I can relate to this. There are quite a few people I know that fit your discription. Nothing wrong with a little healthy anger... :p

Boy do I know that feeling. Good use of your anger. If I may make a suggestion:

[quote] With the ego that shouldn't be there? [/quote]

I'm sure you can craft a better phrase.

With the bible engraved ego that shouldn't be there?:P that better? lol