Anxiety

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It's as mixed up as a dislexic trying to read,

I'm pretty sure dyslexic is spelled with a 'y'.

Okay, I am definitely not a poet, so the only suggestion I can really make is to break it up into stanzas instead of having it written in story form. ie:

It spins faster than a sailfish swims
It's as mixed up as a dislexic trying to read
Yet as clear as air.

But you don't realize
That this air is filled
With black smoke

Anyway, just a suggestion. I didn't vote, because I don't suffer from chronic anxiety, but I think you did a pretty good job with this.

~*~Areida~*~

I don't suffer from anxiety, but I agree with Areida. MAKE IT INTO STANZAS!

Ok sorry. And yes dyslexic is spelled with a y.

I liked it, but please break it into stanzas so it looks like poetry!

This is called a prose poem. It does not need to be put into stanzaz, and it was written this way on purpose.

I liked it, I wrote something like that a while ago...hm, PM me? I like you work and I'd like to get to know writers who have work I like.

hmmm, i'm not sure about this. i really enjoy prose but this didn't seem like prose. or poetry. it seemed unsure and shakey. i have experienced severe anxiety before and i don't feel this quite captured what i felt, although i suppose it's different for everybody.

it didn't make me #feel# anything. it was just another piece.

i did like the first line, however.

This again sounds alot like u.I liked all of it expecialy the pizza part.

It sound more of a small story piece than a poem..

Mostly because its not in stanzas. Sorry, it just makes it more look like a poem.. (shuts up)