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Well...Trent and Jon aren't that bad. I thought it was going to be horrible watching his feelings even going for someone else(they haven't really but it seems like they will) But Kyle... :( poor beautiful Kyle musn't be alone! And when Trent called the party CMP instead of the actual name it freaked me out. I really wonder what that shooting sound was... that kind of confused me, the body parts too. Can't wait to find out what's next!

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Jon was finding it easy to open up to Trent, and reminded himself that he shouldn't trust anyone so quicklu.
Typo

A beetle crawled through the supraorbital, a piece of rotting flesh clamped between its pincers.
"supraorbital" you're getting all over technical on us again.

Here too:
Jon carefully pulled a piece of hairy flesh from the woman's superior temporal line.


Yeah, that is all I have to say. *shrugs*
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