thebshamfuul triumph of sweet revenge

can you feel the pain lingering through your veins
it cant escape
it wont escape
it's now permanent to your blood
you're now suffering and I like to see that
i hat to admit but this is all my fault
you're now suffering and I like to see it
revenge is bitter sweet don't you agree
the shameful triumph of sweet revenge

chorus
you just had to chain me
to the thoughts of broken hearts
the sting of rejection well it's coming back to me
you killed me fast
i guess it couldn't last
it hurts to know you never cared
you just had to say goodbye
(i promise I'll get to back)

you always told me to share my feelings
well I'm sharing them now
does you heart sting an dbeat slower
when i mention that i HATE you i know
i guess i hurt you more

(chorus)

i keep a gun in my pocket
and a cross against my heart
i swear if you hurt me again I'll shoot
and let the bullet do the work
I'll start the riot and ten end it quick
do you feel the sweat rolling down from your head
the cross says i swear to do it
I'll never break this promise
beware revenge it bitter sweet
the shameful triumph of sweet revenge

(chorus)

shar_shar_says_rawr wrote:can you feel the pain lingering through your v[s]a[/s]eins
it can't escape
it wont escape
it's now [s]pernament[/s] permanent to your blood
you're now suffering an [s]di[/s]I'd like to see that
i hate to admit but this is all my fault
you're now suffering and i like to see it
revenge is bitter sweet dont you agree
the shamful triumph of sweet revenge

chorus
you just had to chain me
to the thoughts of broken hearts
the sting of rejection well it's coming back to me
you killed me fast
i guess it couldn't last
it hurts to know you never cared
you just had to say goodbye
(i promise i'll get to back)

you always told me to [s]sahre[/s] share my feelings
well i'm sharing them now
does you heart sting an [<-]d[space]beat slower
when i mention that i HATE you i know
i guess i hurt you more

(chorus)

i keep a gun in my pocket
and a cross [s]agaisnt[/s] against my heart
i swear if you hurt me again i'll shoot
and let the bullet do the work
i'll start the riot and then end it quick
do you feel the sweat rolling down from your head
the cross says i swear to do it
i'll never break this promise
beware revenge it's bitter sweet
the shameful triumph of sweet revenge

(chorus)

I know spelling doesn't really matt when listening to it on the radio but for goodness sake try and proof read a little before you go posting all willy nilly. I got your point. I was distracted by the grammatical errors but it looks to be a rather dark and tormented love/hate song.

sorry i fixed it though

cool

pretty ok, except for some spelling mistakes.
also, the title was mispelt, giving others a bad impression.

agreeing with berrylique here. The title spelling pushed me away, you might want to watch that.

Other than that and the spelling errors, you did an excellent job in expressing your emotions through emotional/dark actions and thoughts. Few can really do this and make it seem less like a rant of death and more of poetic sense of expression. But you seem to do it pretty well