POD 43 -All too Real -On Both Accounts

Philosophy of the Dark
Chapter 43
-All too Real
- On Both Accounts

There are some moments in life when you know exactly what’s
going to happen, and when. Then there are times like these, when the
world throws cards at you. The deck you get is the one you have to live
with.

My father was not supposed to cry, you can be mad at
somebody who’s crying. You cant hate somebody you feel bad for. It’s just
all too real. The problems, the effects, the consequences.

Was what he did really worth what I did to him? I’m beginning to
doubt it.



***



Cold air blew in through my bedroom window. She stared out at the
empty street, watching people walk by carelessly. Downstairs she heard the
faint echo’s of conversation.

Guilt tore at her from all sides, and for once Jamie wished Amber were still
there to say something…anything to make her feel a little bit better.

“Jamie, will you come down here please?” Mary called from the bottom of
the stairs.

Jamie turned and stared at her door, sighing before walking down to meet
them.

“Sit down,” Mary said, motioning toward a seat next to her on the couch.
Jamie sat down silently, not allowing herself a glance at Richard.

“I’ve been thinking a lot…and you know we love this house, but until we get
better situated, we were thinking we should move to a place without stairs.
Just until things get better.”

Jamie didn’t respond, instead she watched her feet on the carpet, digging
her toes in and leaving small shallow holes that disappeared almost
instantly.

“Jamie,” Mary said softly. She put one finger on Jamie’s chin and lifted,
forcing Jamie to meet her eyes.

“What?” Jamie asked.

“Did you hear me?”

“Yes.” She dropped her head back down.

“You understand why don’t you?”

Jamie allowed herself to look at Richard. He was starting at some place far
away, someplace not in the room, but in his mind instead. The way he was
sitting in the chair, his arms loose in his lap, his head falling to one side,
all of said one thing. “This is your fault. I’m like this now because of you.”

There was no way he would be able to live in this house until he could walk,
if he could walk.

Jamie nodded to her feet.

“Good.” Mary put one hand on Jamie’s back and rubbed small circles on it,
soothing. “Pack some things, not everything though, just enough for a
month maybe. After that we’ll come home and decide what to do next.”

“Okay,” Jamie said.

“We’ll leave tomorrow.” Mary kissed Jamie’s forehead and sent her off to
her room.

Jamie didn’t fight the whole way, just walked with her head down.

“Things will get better,” Mary promised, “You’ll see.”

Somehow she doubted that.
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Chatpter 44
-Goodbye[/i]

Then there are times like these, when the
world throws cards at you.

er... this didn't make much sense to me. I think I know which phrase you were trying to use, but it isn't one I know well, so I can't correct you, either.

My father was not supposed to cry, [make this a semicolon, not a comma] you can't be mad at
somebody who’s crying. You can't hate somebody you feel bad for.

Cold air blew in through my bedroom window.

Remember what tense you are in, that is "her". Do you ever read over these things before posting them? You really should. I know you would catch a lot of this stuff on your own.

Guilt tore at her from all sides, and for once Jamie wished Amber were still
there to say something…anything to make her feel a little bit better.

Make the ellipse [...] a comma.

Jamie nodded to her feet.

Okay, what? I think I know what you want to say but...it doesn't work.

*shrugs* This didn't really do anything for me. It felt like a weak chapter trying to stand off of the excitement of the last chapter. I guess they say sometimes you have to have "low" chapters but eh. Your story ebbs and flows, like it should, only more dramatically XD if you can understand what I mean by that.

Yeah...I was really distracted when I wrote this...so I'm probably going to go back and re-write it.

This was good, although there wasn't much to it. I think Clau pointed out the mistakes so there's no point me going over them.

I really am getting....frustrated with Jamie. I want her to bolt, leave her parents behind. Hehe.

Keep it up JC,
Alainna
xxxxx

Yeah, Jamie ought to leave! Her mum hates/sincerely dislikes her, and she's not safe around her dad. She's got a car; why doesn't she scarper??