Mara Jade

Marriage lasts for not just through life.
A love that was passionate and fiery like a
Red flame that can't be quenched.
An amazing journey we went through

Just how lucky can I get with you gone.
Admiring your Jade green eyes only in memory.
Death is only a change of worlds.
Every man has his gem and Mara was mine. Her memory shall live on like an eternal flame. I will always call her name but I will stay for her sake.

Ah... A very nice read. I don't know about poetry though.

Anyways

Admiring you Jade eyes only in memory.

I don't know if I'm right or not, maybe you meant your instead of you?
Because her name is Jade, I'm just not sure, this sentence just needs a little altering I think, if you didn't mean her Jade eyes.

like a eternal --- an

I love reading your Star Wars poems! (just haven't done crits on the others yet, sorry)

Thanks and her eye color is jade green so I'm describing her eye color.
Lanna

Hey Lanna!

Ok!

I really, really liked it!
This one made me cry (again).


You captured Mara very well. I especially like what you did with 'gem'. Since her name was Jade..and jade IS a gem..well yeah!

It's great!

~Timea