alternative history OR how the wooden horse never came to be

This is amazing.

If you printed this on a shirt, I would wear it.
(And, probably, so would a thousand other people at the large Classical-culture-geekfest I'm going to in two weeks.)

I like the "promptly shot" order of the last line - that way, the impact comes later, and thus there is a bigger effect.

Funny, but very abrupt. The title goes well with it, but aparently the "We'll always have Paris" is from a Bogart film which I have not seen, so cannot appreciate.

ok...

#1.

I did not do research (it's summer. I am staying away from books!).
So I guess that is why I have no idea what is being told in this poem!

Sorry, I don't get this. Anyway.....keep up the good work.

-- M.B.Author

I love this. It's so economical and yet so funny.

Not much to crit, then.

All I can really say on this, Snoink, m'dear, is that this was HILARIOUS. My only real critique is maybe instead of saying "she promptly shot at dawn" SHOW us she was promptly shot at dawn?

Sorry to dredge this up, but I was reading Via's exceptional poetry, and I had to say something about this...
Being as absolutely in love with the whole story of Troy, everything about it, this was just great:)
You truly are utterly awesome!
So hysterical...

*adna*

Hey Snoink, Captian Random here,

i really thought this was history not poetry, like no offence, it was to short, and not any feel in it, but you did allow space in the writing, but that wouldn't have mattered because it was to short. Over all i didn't like it, sorry if i was a little harsh.

-CaptianRandom

Well, it was posted in the poetry forums, to be completely fair.

And it does deal with history! Look up "Menelaus."

Id forgotten how much I loved your humor in the almost 2 years I've been away.
Simple, sweet, and deliciously silly.

It's hard to make flash fiction comedy really work but you manage it with pizaze (can't spell that damn word)