Hey I am trying to write a story about a mother and daughter and I would just like ppl to look at the intro and tell me what they think about it.Im trying to perfect every single step of the story before I move on.Is the a good strategy btw?Oh yeah, and concerning its length, its purposefully short keeping in style with the story i'm writing.Thnkx.
Sitting here in the dark staring into the apparent oblivion I am the closest to peace that I will ever reach in this painfully mortal existence. Tears are rolling lifelessly down my face for they lack the energy to be angry, sad or tortured. In my mind I can still hear her. I can always hear her for she has become the discordant symphony that is the perfect accompaniment to my life. And so she is there barely above a whisper but forceful and warped as ever. Though I try not to I clasp to her words for they have power. Power, to incite the deepest hatred, or foster the purest love. If only her hatred were but a façade that could be dissolved in tears or her love more than obligatory. But that is in the world of dreams, a realm which has abandoned me, taunting me with escape just beyond my reach.
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