Mr. Mad Mood

"Honey, why did you have to pain the deck pink, It's a mess!" said Mr. Adams. Everyone calls him by Mr. Mad Mood though because he always was so picky and of coarse mad! But not in a bad way more of a amusing way. But sure did Mr. Mad Mood get just a bit annoyed when someone addressed him to that name. "Sweet pums, I thought you would adore it!" said Mrs. Adam while scrubbing the dishes furiously.

Mr. Mad Mood did not very much want to get a temper tantrum so he gently took the news paper from the kitchen table and leaned back on the couch. "What a nice day to just take Andrew and Alicia to the park. Of coarse Mr. Mad Mood knew they were thinking differently since they were still playing with their new toys they got from granny at Easter celebration.

Mr. Mad Mood fell asleep quickly and put the news paper over his face. He was dreaming about tomorrow being the day after tomorrow being the day yesterday and a week ago when it was Sunday and abut 4 years ago when he was playing and laughing with his children Andrew and Alicia but that didn't happen in quite a long time but he wanted it to be now

Hey there, Winie!

Much better spelling here, hon. Thank you. There were still a few errors, but it wasn't as bad. Here's what I'll do. I'm going to go through this and correct a few spelling errors, highlight a few things, give you some suggestions, a quick summary and then let you do your editing thing, kay?

Crossout and bolds are either spelling or grammar
Green is suggestions for omission
Red are things I will talk about later

Honey, why did you have to [s]pain[/s] paint the deck pink, (should be ?) It's a mess!" said Mr. Adams. Everyone calls him by Mr. Mad Mood [color=green]though because he always was so picky and of [s]coarse[/s] course mad! But not in a bad way - more of [s]a [/s] an amusing way. [/color]But sure did Mr. Mad Mood get just a bit annoyed when someone addressed him to that name. "Sweet pums, I thought you would adore it!" said Mrs. Adam while scrubbing the dishes furiously.

Mr. Mad Mood did not very much want to get a temper tantrum so he gently took the news paper from the kitchen table and leaned back on the couch. "What a nice day to just take Andrew and Alicia to the park. Of [s]coarse[/s] course Mr. Mad Mood knew they were thinking differently since they were still playing with their new toys they got from granny at Easter celebration.

Mr. Mad Mood fell asleep quickly and put the news paper over his face. He was dreaming about tomorrow being the day after tomorrow being the day yesterday and a week ago when it was Sunday and abut 4 years ago when he was playing and laughing with his children Andrew and Alicia but that didn't happen in quite a long time but he wanted it to be now

Spelling Notes:

Coarse means something is rough. Course is a path someone takes, but it is also used when saying 'of course'

All the green things are things I would suggest taking out because they sound awkward.

As for the red - I am going to give some tips now.

1. Telling

You have probably heard the phrase "Show;don't tell' before. Well, I am going to repeat it.

Everyone calls him by Mr. Mad Mood though because he always was so picky and of coarse mad! But not in a bad way more of a amusing way. But sure did Mr. Mad Mood get just a bit annoyed when someone addressed him to that name

Here you tell us tht Mr. Mad Mood does not like his name and that many people call him it. While this is good information, I would suggest you set up a situation - a scene, if you will - that shows the reader these things. You could write a scene about Mr. Mad Mood getting mad at some kid for calling him Mr. Mad Mood. You can show us why he is called that. Think of all the fun things you can do with this! This goes for a lot of writing, so keep it in mind.

2. Emotions and Character Development

Much of this comes with experience, but I suggest you start learning some character development skills. The one I am going to talk about right now is the inclusion of emotion.

He was dreaming about tomorrow being the day after tomorrow being the day yesterday and a week ago when it was Sunday and abut 4 years ago when he was playing and laughing with his children Andrew and Alicia but that didn't happen in quite a long time but he wanted it to be now

Here you tell us what Mr. Mad Mood is thinking about this is a perfect opportunity for including emotion and developing this character. Think about how much cooler this would be if we knew what Mr. Mad Mood thought about what would happen tomorrow with emotion! I don't expect you to grasp this at this very moment, but think about how to include emotion in your stories; you will learn in time.

For these types of things, I would suggest you just keep writing and that you snoop in the Writing Tips section and look at some stuff. Keep writing and a nice effort here. PM me if you ever need anything.