Heyo Jules, I haven't seen my creative writing teacher for ages as I have finished college for the moment, so I really don't know. I have looked into Agents by myself and am thinking of sending to an Agent, but I'm not sure. Gosh it's all so complicated! Plus, I think I should maybe get it all finished!
Only thing is, if Luke wasn't gay would he really be that forward?? I mean you can tell he's that sort of confident guy but even they would get a bit funny rather than really touchy feely...??
Would a guy say this? even a gay one? They're normally not that flamming. More normal. Trust me, I have fourteen gay uncles, I know.
Some of the things Jamie says and does are getting girly. Like you've forgotten he's male. It's weird. I'm forgetting he's male.
I don't know if what happened between Luke and him went to fast, or if there should have been more conversation or what, but it doesn't seem right for some reason. Draw out the end, make more conversation between Jaimy and Luke, and why he can't let his mom see them, even as friends. Also, you think his mom would be more freaked out the way Luke reacted. It just doesn't seem realistic.
The rest of it was very good though! As always. I love this story, tell me when you post the next section, kk? hehe.
-JC
But that is not the question. Why we are here, that is the question. And we are blessed in this, that we happen to know the answer. Yes, in this immense confusion one thing alone is clear. We are waiting for Godot to come. -Beckett
Hey. And maybe once again I spoke too soon. You get disappointment and a good surprise in the space of one Chapter! =O I only found one thing this time, so I'll just show you that and be on to the next part lol!
until he shook my away.
I think you missed a word there, but I've lost where I found this, so I have no idea what it is. Might want to look for it later.
. Whoops! Anyway, it was OK. And um... Evil Luke! Keep up the good work.
Might want to look for it later.
