Ice Cubes #26

Taken down due to publishing

It was good, but where is 25? You put 24.5 and then went to 26! I cannot tell if it is a typo or you skipped some story, but good job. Hope to hear more. Later.

-- M.B.Author

hey yeah there is a number 25 somewhere, its in my protfolio, I just posted 24.5 after...so it got a little ocnfyusing, sorry about that!
Meevs
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"I had sex with Alan"

I'm glad that you put this in like that. Sometimes subjects need to be dropped in at random because it seems more real, more believable.

I'd like to maybe read more about how Jaimiy (Did I spell that completely wrong??) feels about the new baby. You've touched on it already, but I'd love some more.

Chris.

FANTASTIC!!! Awwwwwwww. Is he going to get in touch with Chris and Rob???

Alainna
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FANTASTIC!!! Awwwwwwww. Is he going to get in touch with Chris and Rob???

You will have to wait and see

Jaimiy (Did I spell that completely wrong??)

Jamiy

I will write some more about the baby, there will be lot's as Jamiy clearly is not happy with the situation. I now have quite a happy lay out in my head for how this story is going, which is good because before I was just writing, so it now has a definate end! Yay!

Thanks again Alainna for being so Loyal to Ice cubes

Meevs
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“I liked you’re other room better…it was more you.”

You're=Your

“Well, you move house you get a new room, I have yet to make it mine.”

Doesn't make sense. I think you're missing words here.


Wow. For some reason I loved that it was so short. It worked for it. Even though it's part of a bigger chapter, it just seemed to work this way.

I love how Sappy just jumps in and says that she had sex. It worked for her. And the last paragraph was very powerful. I loved it as usual!

Keep up the good work!
-JC

“I liked you’re other room better

*your

I wont ever go in its room anyway.”

*won't

“No. No its not.

After that first nio could just be a comma, but that's your choice.

The whole time I thought of one thing and one thing only. Chris.

That's sad. He's like, emotionally dependant on Chris...

O_O -realises the time- Well, it's almost two, so i'm going to go get all the animals off my bed and sleep. See you.

Wow that was quite a reviewing frenzy! Thanks for all you're comments, and I hope you enjoy the rest of Ice Cubes
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Yeah. I had to sleep in the computer room, so I thought I'd at least do something fun. And now, I feel like reading more. Getting closer to caught up now, so I'll push on.