You know, I absolutely loved this story. The wording seemed a tad bit juvinile (I love how I spell that wrong!) at parts, but it seemed to give the character a true sense of realism. The final words truely caught my attention. Though there is no true plot line to the story, there really doesn't need to be. It was a good story, and one that I particularly liked.
I feel the dire need to go buy tootsie rolls right now, and I can't really explain why.
Thank you both for taking your time to read this I always appreciate it!
Nyame - (what a pretty username) Me and my friend did that in school! My friend Amy (aka Sappy in Ice Cubes) just made this little nut people...it was strange lol, we did other weird stuff that is also in Ice Cubes. School's fun
As always i enjoyed it. Really hooked into this story.
And doing weird things in history. Always a favourite. Me and my friend turned our teachers desk around. Took him ages to figure oiut his drawers had gone. lol
Man:George look at this.
George: look at what?
Man: Ha made you look!
George: Idiot!
“Let’s put them around the room, see who finds them?”
Are you sure that should be a question mark? It seems out of place, or it doesn't make much sense to me. Add something after it to show why ut was a question.
Sorry, other than that not much to critique on this one..but I think that's a good thing right?
PM me when you post the next section, kk!
-JC
But that is not the question. Why we are here, that is the question. And we are blessed in this, that we happen to know the answer. Yes, in this immense confusion one thing alone is clear. We are waiting for Godot to come. -Beckett
Wow, seriously? I thought that was just me. Well, it's actually Social Studies, but that's close enough, isn't it? Now I'm going to stop before I go into a rant about how much I 'dislike' him lol.
I didn't find anything wrong here, so I'll just say that I thought the kid laughing in the back of the class was a nice touch.
I always appreciate it!
