Introduction to "Dennis"

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Albert Variatorum
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Mon May 14, 2007 1:59 am
Albert Variatorum says... · Mon May 14, 2007 1:59 am
this story has been added to and revised, please look at "Dennis Part None"

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Mon May 14, 2007 2:09 am
Crimson says... · Mon May 14, 2007 2:09 am
This was a real pleasure to read. I found it funny and Dennis has an unusual charm about him. Granted, I'd never want to meet such an unlucky person but I love hearing (and reading) about these sorts of people.

The only thing I could say is double spacing your paragraphs would be a good idea. I knew when they began and ended, but it would make reading your story easier since tabs don't work on fourms.

I can't wait to read the next installment though!
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Tue May 15, 2007 1:16 pm
cheeb says... · Tue May 15, 2007 1:16 pm
Hehehe, this is excellent. It's satirical and funny. It reminded me of Barry Trotter in many ways, especially the footnotes.

Keep it up, I'd like to see more of Dennis. =D
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Tue May 15, 2007 4:19 pm
Jules the jester says... · Tue May 15, 2007 4:19 pm
Your writing reminds me of Terry Pratchett so much. I enoyed reading this. made me chuckle a happy chuckle.

Look forward to more. :D :D :D :D :shock: :D :D :D :D
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