Ice Cubes #22

Taken down due to publishing

Mom had flied a court hearing to get me back

I think you meant flied to be filed =D


I like this chapter! Although I wish stupid Rob would stand up for [s]Jamie[/s] Jaimy =D

Or even Chris! Ahh! It makes me mad at them...stupid sexually abusive men....*glares*

Oh...and I don't like Becca! hehe. But I don't think I'm supposed to, so it's alright!

hehe. PM me when you post the next part, I almost missed this one!

-JC

Fab chapter!!!

Becca is sooo annoying!!!! Argh!! And what is going on with Rob?? Stand up for Jaimiy for goodness sake!!!

I felt. Empty.

Instead of a full stop I think ......would work better.

My earliest memory of seeing is as colourful and vivid as if it only happened yesterday.

????

Great stuff,
Off to read more!!
Alainna
xxxxxx

Hey, and staright off, wow! This was another twist!

Mom had flied a court hearing to get me back.

*filed

“Look, its not that I want to Jamiy.

*it's

I have watched countless men come into our home beat her and me and then leave.

come into our home, beat her and me...

I turned away from them. Expecting

You just needed a comma there, because it makes more sense as one sentance.

I felt. Empty.

Again, I don't think you should have the full stop after felt. If you play around with it you might find something. xD

was kidnapped my evil elves,

*by

And it really does reflect on society today, doesn't it? Looks are the most important thing around these days...