ice Cubes #20

Taken down due to publishing

He's fallen in love with Chris????!!!!! OMG!!! I feel so....sad....

Great irony!!!! Very shocking yet works well!!

I let me hand fall away from him.

Just a typo........lol.

Great as always!!
Alainna
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“I do love Rob you know[,]” He pulls away, sitting up on the side of the bed.

He shifts his weight across my body until he his lying between my legs,

Either I don't get it, or there is an accidental 'H' in is...

AHHH!!! He can't be in love with Chris, NOOOO!!!! (In the good, 'oh my god, did that really happen?' kinda way of coarse.) A very good twist.

Just some small punctuation errors in the dialoug again. Comma's and all that jazz =D

-JC

thanks, idecided that he would fall in love with Chris for a reason. I study psychology and its a fact that a high perecentage of people who were sexually abused develp feelings for their abuser. Its a sad thing really but i thought it could help develop this more.

As always thankyou to you bothfor taking your time to read and review this!

Meevs
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I actually feel happy that Jamie developed real feelings. I don't really know what he might have done if he didn't have Chris. Although I am still a bit suspicious of Chris. xD

This was the only thign that I could find:

He shifts his weight across my body until he his lying between my legs

Maybe he is, or just he's?

And yes, I remember when I started how I said I'd only read like two a day so I wouldn't go through it all in a few days, but I can't resist anymore. =O