Poor Kyle! Like seriously, Dr.Haaser should die. I only like, half way believe that what Dr.Haaser put in Kyle's stomach was a monitering device, I mean I know they need to moniter him but what do they expect is going to make Kyle crazy enough to break Jon? I don't think that he would do it willingly by any means, even if he found out about Jon and Ariel. And they're supposed to be the resistance? That sort of reminds me of the avatar thing from charmed, they really wanted to help but in the end they just destroyed like everything good. But I'm guessing that CMP doesn't really care about good, they just care about what they want no matter what the cost.
I hope so much that Kyle doesn't really hurt Jon, that's my fan side talking. My critic would say that that would be a great addition to Pros. I can't wait to see what's to happen next. Great job!
~Rieda
I love, love.
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