Quote: Chris’s voice is gruff, his throat must be sore
You've changed to present. Your story before had been in the past but it is now written in the present. I liked your story how it was written in the past. I like the way your are writing the story. This i hadn't really seen coming. I had thought about it than just disregarded it.
It doesn't think, doesn't feel. It doesn't laugh or cry. All it does from dusk 'till dawn is make the soldiers die
I like this, once again, muchos too short, but I still love where you're taking the story.
I agree with Alainna, there could be a lot more emotion here, this is an emotional issue, most people would be freaking out, but instead Jamie seems almost too calm for what is happening to him.
Oh, and uh...stupididiot92 (I feel bad typing that, is there something else I can call you?) I like your last sentences, they made me smile. =D kinda like that. hehe.
-JC
But that is not the question. Why we are here, that is the question. And we are blessed in this, that we happen to know the answer. Yes, in this immense confusion one thing alone is clear. We are waiting for Godot to come. -Beckett
You're turning into like, the queen of surprises lol! And I'm only on Chapter 12. =O I have no idea how many surprises you could still have in store lmao. And now I need more.
