this section is really, really short. You might want to add in some dialouge between Chris and Rob, to show how detached from them Jaimy feels, or a conversation between Chris and Jaimy, to deepen the understanding that Jaimy really doesn't like him.
But that is not the question. Why we are here, that is the question. And we are blessed in this, that we happen to know the answer. Yes, in this immense confusion one thing alone is clear. We are waiting for Godot to come. -Beckett
Thanks for that, I was thinking that i needed some dialogue here but I;m just not how to fit it in. I don't know, i guess its harder for me as i have already developed the characters and know how much Jamiy hates Chris, i orget that the reader may not understand it to that extent yet! Im editing this all through now, I have to hand it in on Monday as it is ( i never finished it ) but I think i will keep going with it
Quote: cry it may as well be over a sappy love song or something
a sappy love song? does that have any relation with your character Sappy?
Now i am confused. Is your character a boy or a girl? I think you said that he was a boy when he was still with Clarice, but you have him talking about attractive men. I don't know if you are doing this on purpose or not. But if you aren't i would suggest fixing that.
It doesn't think, doesn't feel. It doesn't laugh or cry. All it does from dusk 'till dawn is make the soldiers die
Hes a boy, i have made hints before that he might also be into guys, i guess it just the character progression, like in the later ice cubes i guess things become more obvious to you, sorry for any confusion
) but I think i will keep going with it 
