Prosthesis #11 /P

Okay I lied, this may be the best Prosthesis ever (it's almost beating the kiss, and that's only because I like Kyle and Jon kissing!)

You had me for a second though. I thought this might have been some odd flashback because the kids name was Kyle and he had blond hair.

And he found poor Jon! Hehe, that was cute how he tried to act like he wasn't terrified to death.

And Sarah turned into one nasty thing! What the hell! I thought she was dead! (excuse my expression) I'm almost glad she's not though, now she has a nasty body that matches her nasty personality in Ch....even though I had BEGUN to like her. Hehe.

He smiled up and her and nodded vigorously. The two figures stopped and pointed at them.

"Shit," Laurie whispered.

"You lost! You lost!" Kyle wiggled out from her grasp and jumped up and down.

*This was my favorite part XD! That's so cute, I don't know how many times my little cousins have been asked to play the quiet came!

Wow, I could imagine all of this Bradness. Wonderful Pro.!

More please
~Rieda

hehe, the extra 800 words only made it better! Mostly because Kyle was undressing Jon...you know what I mean. I'm glad Ariel actually let him be with Jon, I thought she was going to tell him to stay with her, she MUST have had a major character change in Ch. Now I really have to read more. Have to as in my life depends on it.

~Rieda

I thought he was Dead! I was gonna kill you! Depressing. Is the girl dead? I mean totally dead. I wasn't 100% sure.

Your really good and every one of these brings me closer and closer to like crying.

I didn't admit that.

I look forward to more

I have been reading this all along, but havent commented yet, not sure why :S

Anyway, i LOVE it, but i also thought it was a flashaback at first. Anyway post more!!!

miyaviloves

It was long... X_X

You realize you confuse the crap out of me? Okay, sarah coming out of no where. I get it. Jon? There isn't much of an explanation for jon.

Then I just get more confused with the setting: "Finally Jon sat on the bed in nothing but boxers:" A bed? WTF?

So.... WTF in usual CMP style, and WTF, because some parts didn't flow nicely and left me confused.

Hey, Suzanne - guess what? The reason the part about the bed makes no sense is because Incandescence lifted it straight from my story (in which it had a context, of course) - Darkness, Chapter 2. Those extra 800 words? I can't tell for sure - because I didn't see the earlier version - but I would not be at all surprised if most of them were mine. Certainly large chunks of my prose are repeated verbatim here.

Incandescence, I am reporting this to the mods. I will let them take whatever action they deem necessary. I just wanted you to know, I'm on to you. I don't know if you thought you could get away with it because mine is "just" fanfic, or what, but I don't much care.

Anyone else who may be reading? You are more than welcome to read the rest of my story on my Livejournal, here.

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