Just Another Girl

I always said
That I couldn't like you
I even thought
That I should've hated you
But my mind's only playing
Games with my heart again

Then there you were
Kissing me in my dreams
I've been wondering
What the hell it means
When you looked at me
The other day, I realized...

I don't wanna be
Just another girl to you
Love me or hate me
I don't care which you do
As long as you don't forget about me
'Cause I'd rather die than be
Just another girl to you

I've been denying these feelings to myself
I'm not sure if I can take it anymore
Love vs. logic, the battle rages on
Within me

How come I let you pass me by again
And not even say a simple "Hello"?
I guess I'm just too damn shy
To speak to you...
But I won't let you go,

'Cause I don't wanna be
Just another girl to you
Love me or hate me
I don't care which you do
As long as you don't forget about me
'Cause I'd rather die than be
Just another girl to you

I feel like I've been through this
A thousand times before,
But it might be real this time

As long as you're still there
I'll keep going round and round
Always regretting
The words I didn't say

I don't wanna be...
Just another girl...

I don't wanna be
Just another girl
Love me or hate me
I don't care which you do
As long as you don't forget about me
'Cause I'd rather die than be
Just another girl to you

Just another girl,
Just another girl,
You don't know me at all
'Cause I'm just another girl

Oh boy, I know very little about critiquing lyrics... though I also know very little about poetry, but does that stop me? Huh? Hasn't yet!

Now that I've disclaimed the above, I can begin a real critique:

I don't wanna be
Just another girl to you
Love me or hate me
I don't care which you do
As long as you don't forget about me
'Cause I'd rather die than be
Just another girl to you

reading through the first time, I liked this part (this is the refrain, because it rhymes, yes?)

I've been denying these feelings to myself
I'm not sure if I can take it anymore
Love vs. logic, the battle rages on
Within me

Against the longer three lines, the last line was strange to read because it was so much shorter; maybe I just can't imagine it without music, though.

Overall, I thought it was sweet, and I liked how it ended, contradicting everything that was previously said, especially at the beginning: "I always said that I couldn't like you"

Good job

Hi I really liked your song. This was very good. Your better at song writing than I am. Keep up the great work!

Sounds like an overcliched Hilary Duff song if you ask me (which isn't good).

The first three stanzas were very bleak and didn't sound too emotional. From the fourth stanza on, when the rhythm started changing a bit, things picked up. It was quite enjoyable for the next couple of stanzas, but then the cliche bombardment started again.

'Cause I'd rather die than be just another girl to you.'

Ah...I think you'll turn some readers away with that line. Its just that...I've heard that before dozens of times in numerous poems, and it always just sounds like the same empty phrase with no feeling.

Hmm...I like the general idea of the words, but it didn't seem to flow very well. Also, it was rather long...but that could just be me. Happy writing!!!
~Bella~

You could probably find someone to sing this but, to be honest, it's too repetitive and over dramatic for me. There are so many songs out there with the same message, the same style, similar lines. There again, I'm not a huge fan of music and I've heard songs like this a lot so perhaps that's what the average person likes?

niteowl wrote:I always said
That I couldn't like you
I even thought
That I should've hated you
But my mind's only playing
Games with my heart again

This part seems kinda cliche, like a lot of the others have said. I'm sure a bit of tweaking can fix this.

Then there you were
Kissing me in my dreams
I've been wondering
What the hell it means
When you looked at me
The other day, I realized...

I don't wanna be
Just another girl to you
Love me or hate me
I don't care which you do
As long as you don't forget about me
'Cause I'd rather die than be
Just another girl to you

I loved these two parts, especially the chorus. I agree with the thought that 'I'd rather die than be' is a bit too serious and dramatic. Maybe change that sentence a bit? Otherwise, I loved the message and the 'girl power' kind of attitude it has.

Keep writing. I hope to read some more of your stuff soon.

This is really generic. It kinda has the same "Tide is High" vibe. Try to make it more original.