Chapter One

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Maybe
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Tue Mar 20, 2007 1:33 am
Maybe says... · Tue Mar 20, 2007 1:33 am
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Be the cartoon heart. Light a fire, light a spark. Light a fire, flame in my heart. We'll run wild, we'll be glowing in the dark.
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Tue Mar 20, 2007 11:07 pm
Pyxis says... · Tue Mar 20, 2007 11:07 pm
I really liked this-
the plot seems promising

My only problem is the name Deski-it just doesn't seem like it would fit into the time frame.

There are some minor problems, but if you read through you should find them.

Keep writing this. It's great!

:) :D :)
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Tue Mar 20, 2007 11:27 pm
Maybe says... · Tue Mar 20, 2007 11:27 pm
Thanks, Pyxis. I'll keep that in mind. The names i'm using right now probably are not going to be the ones i'm going to end up using, but i'll keep a few of them. Thanks for the advice. I'll definatly keep posting my work!
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