Chionophobia #39 /P

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Incandescence
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Tue Mar 06, 2007 4:29 am
Incandescence says... · Tue Mar 06, 2007 4:29 am
Removed.
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Riedawriter23
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Tue Mar 06, 2007 4:49 am
Riedawriter23 says... · Tue Mar 06, 2007 4:49 am
Omg. That was badass. When you said answers...I thought you were joking with me to be totally honest. Chionophobia is a secret agency? Sadly that means I was wrong when I guessed lol. But...oh wow, that was just an amazing Ch.

Everyone's involved! Ariel, Sarah, Jon, Kyle, not to mention two agencies...was the fake agency that went to visit Jon...Chionophobia, or a third agency?

And you don't know who's on who's side! Such suspence and very well displayed.
I can't wait until Ch. #40!

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Wed Mar 07, 2007 3:29 pm
TellATaleForTwo says... · Wed Mar 07, 2007 3:29 pm
Son of a -----! So Jonathan's in danger huh?

*Sarah slammed the door and clicked the locks into place. Kyle suddenly felt very aware of everything in the hallway: its emptiness, the mosquito on the ceiling. He considered going back to his room, but decided to venture out, just a little.*

You meant Ariel there right?
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Sat Mar 10, 2007 3:16 am
Emerson says... · Sat Mar 10, 2007 3:16 am
She began to more seriously struggle for air beneath him, writhing under his hands
'more seriously' sounds so odd to read...

She turned to him and cocked her head, laughed at his anger.
is laugh in the right tense?

And how am I threat?"
A thread/threatening.

we can make all those nasty charges against you go away."
Lovely way to bring back that plot line :-D

she breathed off her dress.
What?

Sarah slammed the door and clicked the locks into place.
OK, are you messing with us, or is this a typo?
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Incandescence
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Sat Mar 10, 2007 3:18 am
Incandescence says... · Sat Mar 10, 2007 3:18 am
A typo, I'm afraid. =]
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