Noticed a few typos and spelling mistakes in there. Also, remember to add a paragraph for each new speaker, a couple of times you had Wiggins and Tobey speaking in the same paragraph and I didn’t know which one of them was talking.
I think it was more common to be called a ‘copper’ or ‘blue’ rather than ‘cop’.
An interesting beginning, or a short story if you don’t continue this, and I liked the simple but effective way it was told by a girl in disguise.
One other thing though, you need to have spaces between words and after dialogue, you failed to do that on a few points.
I hope to read more from you as I enjoyed reading this, I’m a fan of Holmes and Watson.
I liked it. I loved it. I MUST HAVE MORE!!!!!!!!!!!!! YOU MUST WRITE MORE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
"In a sort of ghastly simplicity we remove the organ and demand the function...We laugh at honour and are shocked to find traitors in our midst. We castrate and bid the geldings be fruitful." ~C.S. Lewis
Loved, in fact! Very creative, and I totally adored Kit. Don't have time to crit it right now, but when I get the chance, I will!
