Birth

Comforting warmth leaked,
seeping out of lethargic
awakening, heating water
that enveloped no longer;
a fitful dormancy.

Jiggity wrote:In the depths
of darkness pulsing,
within and yet not
apart of; earth,
rich and moist... (beautiful! the images are so....so.....good! haha, for lack of a better word. your punctuation is strange but fantastic!)

something stirred. (I like how this is set off by itself.)

Comforting warmth leaked,
seeping out of lethargic
awakening, heating water
that enveloped no longer
a fitful dormancy. (not as marvelous as the first, though still great. 'lethargic awakening', I thought was an exceptional phrase.)With a rushing roar,
sloshing and a-splashing,
the world gave way. Through
a slimy tunnel of intransigent
stasis, it fell into-- (again, I love your punctuation. it reads so smoothly. and the image is still going strong.)

Riots of colour
interspersed with explosions
of alternating pitch as
the earth groaned, distended
protusions deflating. (references to sound and color; good, good.)

With its arrival, the earth
swelled, joyous. But the sun bled
red fire into the blue, fleeing
the skies welcome embrace;
darkness fell, upon
the birthing of Man. (the ending seemed a little rushed. I would suggest drawing this part out more and maybe shortening the beginning, if that's the effect you want to go for.)