V-Day 2: Commerciality

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Valentines Day is here again and I really wish it weren't...
It came again last year, so what's the point of it again this year?

Candys in rectangle boxes are
just as good as candy in heart shaped ones.
Duh. Get it through your mind!

"It's the thought that counts" apparently
died many, many years ago...
But to replace yoru thoughts and empty your wallets
they have:

Chocolate and candy, frilly laces
in white, pink, red, and once, blue.
Teddy bears, those plush bears,
sometimes even bears that kiss.
Humorous love cards, just love cards,
Cards that were meant to say
"I was thinking of you but ran outta cash
So I picked this one from a merchant drifter."
There is even "special" lengerie
from fluff trimmed bras, to candy underwear.
Nothing like getting underwear between your teeth!
There are shaving kits, dazzled up,
The red on the blades aren't that settling...
Oh and the fake rolex watches suddenly become REAL
The moment February is a month.
And don't forget the pizza that is
made ESPECIALLY in a heart shape for you.
Ooh, and also, that Stupid Cupid on every
goddamn three-hued pink pair of socks!
Symbols of love gone down the drain to
symbolize what a chump YOU are for
believing that a dinner anywhere, with
a bottle of champange is "romantic."
Lest we forget the cheap diamonds,
cheap gold, probably fools, although pretty, it's cheap,
low quality, low content, crap that was
raised seven hundred dollars and is now half off.
(That's how they work, doncha know?)
Hearts are everywhere, even in roses
Buy a dozen get two roses free!

And if buying her twelve dozen roses, a red bra,
a journey diamond pendent (he went to Jared BITCH!),
a plush teddy bear that lights up and goes "SMOKING HOT MAMA!"
when you put it to another bear with the opposite "gender",
doesn't get her in bed with you, then,
For God's sake, man, you're not gonna get laid.




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Ha! Fantastic voice.

As a poem, of course, it doesn't go too far, but it is humorous and really enjoyable to read. A nice break from angsty/cliche/pretentious poetry. Yay!

The litmag I'm a part of at school sponsored a Valentine's-themed poetry cafe and a friend of mine read something called "Hate Poem". It was fantastic.

a journey diamond pendent (he went to Jared BITCH!)

*falls off chair laughing*

I can't offer much of a critique...I suppose I can't crit seriously because this wasn't as serious a poem, but it is really strong in terms of tone/voice. Hurrah!

Colleen
"My pet, I've been to the devil, and he's a very dull fellow. I won't go there again, even for you..."




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I had a little George Carlin moment...

Yeah I always am like this around holidays... I'm glad if you liked it.

Those Jared commercials annoy the crap out of me though it's like...

"He has herpes, Hepetitus B, polio, he's bald, he weighs 768 pounds, he is 56 and still lives with his mother while I am 25 and on my own, he once squashed his cat and then hid the evidence in the trash compactor, he murdered several children because he was in a withdrawal due to support groups taking away his crystal meth and viagra which caused his two inch penis to stand on end for a record of seven hours and twenty six minutes but then they had to chop that off once it changed from blue to black... But he went to Jared!"

IT'S THAT!!! IT'S THAT!!!



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