Anywyas, now that that's done with...
It was very short. Quotes are short. The back of cereal boxes are short. Poems, in my opinion, should last a little longer. A poem should read at least five minutes and make a reader think about it's contents. This poem is a statement. Boom. Your point is made. There is no digging. There is no interpertation. You say what you are feeling in a couple lines and leave it at that. In my opinion, this leaves the reader feeling empty and blank, and cheated of good poetry. For me there is little emotion in this piece.
But don't give up!!! Poems are a fabulous way to vent feelings and experience new ones. You do have some promise, keep that in mind. The next poem you post (and there had better be a next one
), PM me an I'll crit it also!!
-Kylan
