Chionophobia #14 /P

Removed.

I really liked this, only one thing that bothered me, would Damon really swear infront of and to this man that he appears to respect so greatly? I'm just not sure if that would happen.

Apart from this well done i hope to see much more, you are a very talented writer!

Miyaviloves

I really enjoyed this one as well. I also have a boy named Damon in my novel and he's quite the idiot. hehe. Anyway____

“Look, Damon.” Kyle stared into his green eyes. “What you accomplish and what you’re known for don’t mean shit if you can’t tell somebody.

For the bold though, I would consider using the word doesn't instead of don't since Kyle is acting like a smarty pants. lol.

Great job, can't wait to read your next post!

I agree w/ that too
I just makes more sense

Yeah Lindz like you can make more sense LOL! Still love it Brad. YOU ROCK! (HAD to read it again, just to be ready for the next one.)

and in recent times, Kyle new, for Kyle’s department of mathematics.

missing the letter k in 'knew'

fourteen hundred dollar chairs

are there 14 $100 chairs, or $1,400 chairs? That bit confused me.


I've caught up, good good good. Always good, always great to read. I hope you mail me that signed copy I've asked for.