Beautiful. I agree with JC though, the lack of characterization was it's demising quality. If you could just write a bit more to Jackson and elizabeth's characters, we could feel what Jackson felt, and mourn for both of them, but other than that, it was really awesome.
If life gives you lemons, throw them back at life and scream "I don't want your damn lemons!"
This story was quite intriguing and kept me reading til the very end.
The deaths were kinda sad and unexpected. The plot, though, was great and interesting. The story development is what kept me reading. I enjoyed how well written it was.
Forgot to look for spelling, grammatical errors, etc.
Great job, though!
"The test of literature is, I suppose, whether we ourselves live more intensely for the reading of it."
-Elizabeth Drew
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