The Guild of Trees: A Project

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A Personal Backstory


A long time ago, when I was approximately 9 years old and several years before I joined YWS, I wrote a novel which I called The Guild of Trees. I worked on it after school every day, first starting by hand and eventually retyped the whole thing into Microsoft Word - which was pretty rudimentary back then. Even an artistically gifted relative of mine illustrated an elaborate cover for the story. Over a few years, I worked tirelessly at editing and revising the work. At one point, I even began to work on a sequel! However, time went on and I grew up and in many ways, grew out of the story.

However, the story has continued to stick in my mind because I consider it the first evidence of my commitment to the craft. Before, I had written plenty of short stories but The Guild of Trees was truly the first massive undertaking for me creatively. I believe in the premise and unique qualities of the story, which is why I am now attempting the daunting task of rewriting the whole thing - hopefully with more mastery and a slightly different, and older, perspective.

For many years, I have found my creative home in the world of poetry and I still think and feel that I belong more there than in the world of prose. However, at the same time, this could be a fun challenge of working beyond my comfort zone and getting back to my roots, in a way. I don't think I will be prolifically writing, as it will take time to get back into the groove of writing fiction and trying to rehash the story. Most unfortunately, I have lost the original story so I am working purely from a very poor memory as it relates to plot, characters, and the whole shebang.

The whole project will be probably full of inconsistencies, rusty writing, and maybe some slightly confused plot points, so please bear with me.

Premise


Mae Marley is furious with her parents. At fifteen, she has suddenly been permanently uprooted over the summer holidays to the worst place in the world: suburbia. Gone is the bustling city, where she had everything at her fingertips and the freedom to embark on uncontained adventure with her friends. The only silver lining is the vast greenspace that lies across the street and Mae spends hours walking the many labyrinthine paths to escape the dullness of home. And then one evening, she hears whispers on the leaves and, all of a sudden, maybe suburbia is exactly the adventure Mae has been waiting for.

How can you help?


  • I would absolutely love supportive comments to help motivate
  • Light feedback is welcome, although in-depth revision is not required at this time as this project is very much still in nascent stages
  • All your ideas! An additional character? A different way to get from Point A or Point B?
  • Your guidance - at times, I will ask questions if I'm feeling stuck and would love input when solicited

I guess we should get the ball rolling...
this tender self • metamorpoiesis • i have returned with the swell

What is to give light must endure burning. – Viktor Frankl




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this tender self • metamorpoiesis • i have returned with the swell

What is to give light must endure burning. – Viktor Frankl




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Gender Female
Points 19326
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I have a bit of a teaser of the first chapter. Am I going in the right direction? Presently, Mae is a bit of a Debbie Downer and hates her life because moving to suburbia from the city is just the worst thing ever!!! But anyway, it's really short and I do have more. Depending on what feedback I get, I may consider actually posting the first chapter.

As always, let me know, and I appreciate any and all input <3

Spoiler
Chapter 1.

Hands on her chin, cheeks squished, Mae stared forlornly out her window. The rain drizzled in little rivers down the glass, distorting the view into a dreary kaleidoscope of twisted trees and the wet suburban street. It was quiet, the sort of quiet that creates a din out of boredom. In this moment, Mae was acutely aware of how dull life had become. She felt an uncomfortable hotness form in the pit of her stomach and it rose upwards, colouring her cheeks a little bit redder. She clenched her jaw. Why had her parents done this to her?

Of course, when they had sat down for dinner that fateful day just a few months ago, at the precipice of the summer holidays, the lasagne gooey and bubbling in the pan on the table, Mae was already suspicious. Lasagne was her favourite meal but her mother rarely cooked. The Marley family diet was typically sourced from the tenth-floor cafeteria of the law firm highrise in which her mother worked. Late nights stuck on cases meant Bridget Marley would arrive home like a droopy houseplant, bagged takeaway boxes filled with rice pilaf and steamed vegetables hanging off her arms like dying leaves. Tonight, though, Bridget had come home early, bagless and boxless, and smiling from ear to ear. There was a lightness about her that Mae noticed, a lightness she had never seen her mother carry. And now her suspicions were confirmed, the lasagne a giant red tomato flag planted much too firmly and comfortably in the middle of the dining table. Mae slouched a little into her seat, eyes narrowed ever so slightly. She barely moved as her father stood up and began to portion out pieces on plates.

“Corner or middle?” Morris Marley asked brightly, his obliviousness as clear as the blue of his eyes.

“Corner,” mumbled Mae. She liked the crisp, cheesy edges the best. Morris passed his daughter the plate, along with some cutlery.

“Bon appétit!” He waved his hand flamboyantly, grinning broadly, and passed another plate along to Bridget.

For a few minutes, the three of them ate in hung silence, nothing but the clatter of knife and fork hitting ceramic. There was a pause as Bridget and Morris looked at each other, some sort of marital telepathy taking place as they decided when and how - and maybe who - was going to be the first to speak, the first to confirm the worst of Mae’s fears. With a sudden, sharp nod, Bridget then turned to look at her daughter. Mae’s dark brown hair draped resolutely in front of her face, as she chewed her food with an almost militaristic focus. Bridget put her knife and fork down.

“Mae, your father and I would like to discuss something with you,” Bridget said, a soft smile forming on her lips. At a recent business meeting, she had been taught to display positivity to generate client buy-in. Bridget figured the approach could have applicability elsewhere, too.
Mae looked up at her mother, one eyeball barely visible through the shroud of hair. “Discuss? Or tell me?”

Bridget sighed audibly, deflating with a whoosh. She looked to Morris for help, almost begging him with her eyes. While he was undeniably a lazy husband in the house aspect, he had always been a doting father, somehow more attuned than Bridget. Perhaps it was his lackadaisical approach to life in general; most days, he contentedly wore stinky, old sweatpants and sat behind computer screens creating user manuals for all sorts of appliances, from dishwashers to lawnmowers. It was safe to say that Morris Marley had a knack for demystifying the complicated and making it make sense, fifteen-year-old daughters included. In many ways, he was the voice of calm reason that balanced Bridget’s neuroticism.

“Honey,” began Morris as he took over from his wife. It almost sounded like he was apologizing. “Your mother and I have decided to embark on an adventure. You see, the law firm is just doing too well and based on some restructuring of the clientele demographic…” Mae zoned out as her father droned on in fancy words about this supposedly wonderful opportunity for their family, how they would be living simpler, more quietly, she wouldn’t have to take the bus to school anymore, mom could be home for dinner every night, they could even get a dog, you know?

Now, looking back on that evening as she stared out the window, Mae could unravel the film reel of her life for the last two months: the days of packing up items into boxes, Bridget and Morris emphasizing that this was the perfect moment to declutter!, the strange men coming into the house one afternoon to take away all the cardboard boxes and drive them away to a house and a street and a town Mae had never even set eyes on, saying goodbye to her friends and thinking how could you even call this a party?, the feeling of despair when her mother unlocked the front door of the new house and the inside smelled empty and new and strange like she was a guest with no host, and now the endless, uncountable days that had ticked by, summer holidays gone to waste like vandalized lines on a prison wall.

Everything sucked.

Who knew life would end at the young age of fifteen? Mae pondered the inescapability of her situation, absentmindedly tracing the rain droplets on the window with her finger. A small part of her looked forward to school starting in a few days, when it would give her something to actually do, to actually show up for. And yet… she could only assume her classmates would be as terrible as the cookie-cutter, lifeless neighbourhood in which she found herself. Mae sighed deeply. Without the liveliness of her city, her friends gallivanting off to the mall and July music festivals, she was also trapped within the desolation of her mind.
this tender self • metamorpoiesis • i have returned with the swell

What is to give light must endure burning. – Viktor Frankl



i am neither a loose leaf nor do i like loose leafs. really, i am a piece of wide-ruled looseleaf paper.
— looseleaf