The Voice

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Chantel
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Tue Nov 07, 2006 6:55 pm
Chantel says... · Tue Nov 07, 2006 6:55 pm
The Voice

What is the voice in your head?
Is it your conscience?
Is it you?
Is it God?
Can you trust your senses?
Can you trust your heart when your head fails?
Can you trust yourself?
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rosethorn
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Tue Nov 07, 2006 9:23 pm
rosethorn says... · Tue Nov 07, 2006 9:23 pm
There is no rythym to this poem. I am certaintly not saying that poetry must rhyme but it should have some sort of flow to it. This is a very cutting piece with no energy whatsoever. The ideas have potential but the poem should be scrapped.

As always,

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