Harsh Reviews

MaybeAndrew · 2020-09-14T21:51:56Z

A Disclaimer I am no expert. But I do have one skill, a skill that every human has; I can be honest. Sometimes when reviewing, I hold back. To preserve people's feelings I don't really say what I think, or I don't critique the points I want to. Because no one asked Andrew to tell them his honest full opinion on their work. Well, here is the place to ask for it! If you want your work to be seen by eyes that will not baby you and [/b]will[/b] hold you to the standard of the amazing author you could be, I want to help. You can get honest complete feedback to help build your story into its best version. I will read your story closely and thoughtfully, and give you my most honest and considered opinoin. I will tell you if I would read your work outside of reviewing, I'll tell you if I'd pay money for it, and I'd tell you if I'd share it. And if I wouldn't do one of those things, I'll tell you why. I hope my somewhat harsh opinion can help. The only reason I share it is I believe deeply you can be an amazing writer, and that the only way to get there is through constant self-reflection and improvement, and maybe, just maybe, I can help you do that. If you are in need of a review, just post a link to your work! I read short story's and novels regularly, so I could be of the most help there, I would also love to read a piece of nonfiction, especially something that's an argument because I love arguing. Poetry is probably where I'd have the least to say, but currently, I'm trying to get into poetry, so maybe eventually I'll be able to help. Rules It's called Harsh for a reason You asked for a harsh review, so prepared to get one, that means, Don't Argue If someone gives me a harsh review I have a hard time not arguing! Please don't do this! Arguing with the reviewer's opinions helps no one. Take it or leave it. If the reviewer misunderstand what you were saying or trying to do in the story, you can explain that to them, and that can help them critique effectively. That being said, if someone misunderstood something, that may not be their fault, and could be a sign others will as well. If the reader is confused, that's a problem and one the you should fix in editing. Understand that what I say could most definitely be wrong My critiques could be incorrect, they could come from a weird personal preference I hold that nobody else does, or they could be because I didn't get enough sleep. I'll try my best to avoid this, and state, when I believe, something's just my weird thought, but I still might critique your story in ways that are unhelpful. All your get from my review is a look inside the head of someone who read your work. But, I think a real look into someone's head can be extremely useful. I can be a test to see if the critical agent, publisher, or inattentive reader at home will like your story, and what they'll think of it. So, take everything I say with a grain of salt, but do remember, enough grains of salt can really ruin a meal. The piece cannot be longer than five thousand words This is a rare problem, but I don't have infinite time and want to be able to review more than just your work (sorry), and if its too long, I will not be able to give it a considered opinion and still have enough time to do other reviews. If it's long, maybe consider splitting it up into multiple pieces, but I cannot guarantee I will read all of the pieces, either. Never, ever, under any circumstances, post someone else work in here Pretty self-explanatory, just don't! I'm excited to read your work a plurality of times and review it! In full transparency, I'm a bit busy, and I normally read the work three times if I'm going to review it harshly, so sometimes it might take up to a week for you to get your review back, but I'll make sure to do it eventually. Thanks, and keep writing, Andrew

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Sat Jan 22, 2022 6:01 pm

NewHope says... · Sat Jan 22, 2022 6:01 pm

I would like to enter part of the prologue into a competition so I'd love you to be meticulous until the line: His body screamed in unbelievable pain. A white light flashed in front of his lidded eyes. “No,” he screamed, “No, no, no!”

Oh and preferably something about that part of the prologue by 7-10 Feb.

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Sat Jan 22, 2022 8:43 pm

MaybeAndrew says... · Sat Jan 22, 2022 8:43 pm

@lehmanf
I'd be glad to review your prologue. I should do that very soon!

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Sat Jan 22, 2022 9:12 pm

MaybeAndrew says... · Sat Jan 22, 2022 9:12 pm

Reviewed both of them!

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Thu Feb 03, 2022 12:10 pm

felistia says... · Thu Feb 03, 2022 12:10 pm

Hi Andrew.

I'd love if you could have a look at my novel. I'm currently on my fifth draft of this story and I'm looking for ways to improve.

- Title: Quest for Fire- Book One- Into the Mists

- Genre: Fantasy\Action\Adventure

- Short Introduction:

The story is based in a fantasy world with dragons, dinosaurs and present day animals (no humans). Zoltar lives in the Shadow Talon dragon tribe. Certain events cause him to embark on a journey to find a mysterious jewel in order to save his tribe from extinction. We met lots of other characters along the way and get into many different situations.

The Quest for Fire - Into the Mists - Prologue

I'm currently on book one of four and I'm 32 chapters in.

Thanks for taking a look in advance.

Best regards
Felistia.

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Fri Feb 04, 2022 8:42 pm

MaybeAndrew says... · Fri Feb 04, 2022 8:42 pm

@felistia finished your review! Thanks for the request.

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Mon Feb 07, 2022 5:55 pm

StormyZSnifter says... · Mon Feb 07, 2022 5:55 pm

Hey uuuhhh I posted the second chapter of my story and I was watching if you could review? It is by far the worst chapter in the story for various reasons but even so I'd love to get it out of the green room... If you aren't busy, do you think you could give it a look?

https://www.youngwriterssociety.com/work/StormyZSnifter/The-Tale-of-the-Shade-SquadPart-One-Chapter-Two-153313

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Mon Feb 07, 2022 8:46 pm

MaybeAndrew says... · Mon Feb 07, 2022 8:46 pm

@StormyZSnifter
I'll have it reviewed by the end of the week!

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Mon Feb 07, 2022 8:48 pm

StormyZSnifter says... · Mon Feb 07, 2022 8:48 pm

Yayy thanks:) apologies in advance for the tangled writing

“It is well known that reading quickens the growth of a heart like nothing else.”

― Catherynne M. Valente, The Girl Who Circumnavigated Fairyland in a Ship of Her Own Making

"I believe in Cornpy Supremacy."

- Stormy Z. Snifter

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Thu Feb 24, 2022 11:01 pm

momonster says... · Thu Feb 24, 2022 11:01 pm

hey andrew! if you could review my poem take me with you as harshly as you can, i would super appreciate it! thank you!

previously MomoandAppa, LordMomo, MomoMajesty, and dancingontheclouds

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Fri Feb 25, 2022 3:23 pm

MaybeAndrew says... · Fri Feb 25, 2022 3:23 pm

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I'm no pro at poetry but I'll try my best!
Expect a review by the end of today!

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Fri Feb 25, 2022 3:57 pm

momonster says... · Fri Feb 25, 2022 3:57 pm

thanks!!

previously MomoandAppa, LordMomo, MomoMajesty, and dancingontheclouds

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Mon Mar 07, 2022 6:33 pm

BEASTtheHUN says... · Mon Mar 07, 2022 6:33 pm

May someone please give me a review on my work Picking through the Rubble Break 2
Thank you.

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Wed Mar 09, 2022 2:30 pm

MaybeAndrew says... · Wed Mar 09, 2022 2:30 pm

I'll review that within the week!

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StormyZSnifter

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Wed Mar 09, 2022 10:24 pm

StormyZSnifter says... · Wed Mar 09, 2022 10:24 pm

hullo sir it is me again...

I am dying to get a review for my third chapter. It is more recent, and hopefully of a higher quality than my 2nd chapter that was a glorified lore-dump lol

Anytime you can get around to it would be really appreciated!

“It is well known that reading quickens the growth of a heart like nothing else.”

― Catherynne M. Valente, The Girl Who Circumnavigated Fairyland in a Ship of Her Own Making

"I believe in Cornpy Supremacy."

- Stormy Z. Snifter

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Sun Mar 13, 2022 8:46 pm

MaybeAndrew says... · Sun Mar 13, 2022 8:46 pm

I'm so sorry, I've been so busy, but I'll review both of those tomorrow!

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