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Sun Apr 05, 2020 5:16 pm
Mageheart says... · Sun Apr 05, 2020 5:16 pm
@Katteex: Government shade is something I definitely need to do more of. :P

@PrincessInk: Thanks. <3

@mckaylaam: That sucks. :( I hope you're staying safe!
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Sun Apr 05, 2020 6:14 pm
Mageheart says... · Sun Apr 05, 2020 6:14 pm
Edit: As of December 22nd, 2020, all of the poems in this thread have been edited out. They all appear in a poetry book I'm self-publishing, so I thought it would be best to take them down from the site. Thank you to everyone who read the poems as they came out, and I hope you enjoy any future poems I write for future NaPo challenges!
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Mon Apr 06, 2020 11:09 am
Mageheart says... · Mon Apr 06, 2020 11:09 am
Edit: As of December 22nd, 2020, all of the poems in this thread have been edited out. They all appear in a poetry book I'm self-publishing, so I thought it would be best to take them down from the site. Thank you to everyone who read the poems as they came out, and I hope you enjoy any future poems I write for future NaPo challenges!
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Tue Apr 07, 2020 6:01 am
mckaylaam says... · Tue Apr 07, 2020 6:01 am
"remnants" and "happily ever after" are great poems! My favorite part of "remnants" was the first stanza, I really felt that I could relate to it.
i let myself forget
about the to-do list
i carefully typed out
yesterday morning

Additionally, I really liked your last stanza in "happily ever after" when you wrote about seeing yourself in sad characters and hoping that those characters get their happily ever after. The whole poem was definitely a lovely piece on hope and tragedies.

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Tue Apr 07, 2020 1:59 pm
aether says... · Tue Apr 07, 2020 1:59 pm
Oh my gosh I love how your Day 5 remnants poem evolves—the last two stanzas turn the poem smoothly towards a direction I didn't expect, and I really felt something by the end of reading it. <3 I love how you go from describing the old clothes so normally to describing how abnormal you've seemingly become, which I found was such an effective comparison!

(Aah I also really like your happily ever after poem after reading it just now <3)

You're doing great, Mage!!! c: I'm really loving the theme you've chosen this year, and I'm excited to see more of your poems!!
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Tue Apr 07, 2020 5:09 pm
Mageheart says... · Tue Apr 07, 2020 5:09 pm
Thanks for the compliments, @mckaylaam and @AvantCoffee! I'm really glad that you're enjoying my poems so far.
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Tue Apr 07, 2020 5:09 pm
Mageheart says... · Tue Apr 07, 2020 5:09 pm
Edit: As of December 22nd, 2020, all of the poems in this thread have been edited out. They all appear in a poetry book I'm self-publishing, so I thought it would be best to take them down from the site. Thank you to everyone who read the poems as they came out, and I hope you enjoy any future poems I write for future NaPo challenges!
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Wed Apr 08, 2020 4:10 pm
Mageheart says... · Wed Apr 08, 2020 4:10 pm
Edit: As of December 22nd, 2020, all of the poems in this thread have been edited out. They all appear in a poetry book I'm self-publishing, so I thought it would be best to take them down from the site. Thank you to everyone who read the poems as they came out, and I hope you enjoy any future poems I write for future NaPo challenges!
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Wed Apr 08, 2020 6:08 pm
Hkumar says... · Wed Apr 08, 2020 6:08 pm
Oh your poem sisyphus is so amazing. Right now I am also stuck with a lot of assignments and I can feel those words that you are saying here.
tears prick at the edges
of my eyes,
but i pretend that i am
not fazed by defeat--
even when i struggle to
get back to my feet.

Again, I can see myself in this position now.
Great work! Keep writing like this <3
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Thu Apr 09, 2020 12:07 am
mckaylaam says... · Thu Apr 09, 2020 12:07 am
gathering my words
into my trembling arms,
i shape them into
a poor excuse for an answer
and once again
try to answer
this impossible
homework assignment.


I can definitely relate to this at the moment, since I'm struggling with having to do multiple discussion board assignments for some of my classes. Some of the assignments are easier, but other ones are harder for me and I end up scrapping so much of what I write. Great work, though, you're making good progress :)

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Thu Apr 09, 2020 8:25 pm
Mageheart says... · Thu Apr 09, 2020 8:25 pm
@Hkumar and @mckaylaam, I'm glad you like my poem, but I'm sorry it's relatable to both of you - I hope your assignments get easier soon!
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Thu Apr 09, 2020 8:40 pm
Mageheart says... · Thu Apr 09, 2020 8:40 pm
Edit: As of December 22nd, 2020, all of the poems in this thread have been edited out. They all appear in a poetry book I'm self-publishing, so I thought it would be best to take them down from the site. Thank you to everyone who read the poems as they came out, and I hope you enjoy any future poems I write for future NaPo challenges!
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Fri Apr 10, 2020 3:07 pm
Mageheart says... · Fri Apr 10, 2020 3:07 pm
Edit: As of December 22nd, 2020, all of the poems in this thread have been edited out. They all appear in a poetry book I'm self-publishing, so I thought it would be best to take them down from the site. Thank you to everyone who read the poems as they came out, and I hope you enjoy any future poems I write for future NaPo challenges!
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Sat Apr 11, 2020 12:46 am
kattee says... · Sat Apr 11, 2020 12:46 am
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I just want to say that you're amazing to be able to write poems every single day. I --

I'm sorry for being inactive! So many things happened these past few days. I really really promise that I'd be more active !!

Now, the overused tropes one was striking. People downplay novels, poems, etc. because they're cliche, but I think a cliche story grounds it. It's humane so that's why it happens a lot.

and with the "home" poem, I feel you. It's so scary to open one's heart because the possibility of being disappointed or hurt is there. :( I can empathize with this one, especially with what's happening recently.

If you want some sweet reviews to your poems, short stories, and essays, come by Katteelogue.

Have a lovely day❤️
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Sat Apr 11, 2020 6:13 pm
Mageheart says... · Sat Apr 11, 2020 6:13 pm
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Don't worry about it, @Katteex! And thanks for the compliments. :)
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