My Savior

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He is my savior,
Jesus Christ the Lord.
He held and comforted me,
When times were bad.
He gave me the courage and strength,
To do what I needed,
And was always there beside me.
He never let me lose hope or faith,
And always grieved with me.
When I was sad, he was sad,
But he never let me give up.
He was my strength, my shoulder to lean on.
When times were tough,
It was he who’d help me and guide me.
He gave me the strength to find who I really was,
He is my savior.
The light of a new friendship is peaking out from the hills.




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I suppose that I could say that this is the most inspirational thing I ever read, but then that would be stretching the truth a little. You have a wonderful topic here. Jesus... wow. Yeah. That's full of rich imagery right there. All you have to do is pick up a bible to be confronted by the imagery of Jesus and all his glory. It's just awesome like that.

The problem is, this poem doesn't really add anything to it. Yeah, you say that he is your strength and shoulder to lean on, but everybody can say that. In fact, that's almost become clichéd, sad to say. Oh yeah... it might be true, but you need to present it in a different way which makes it unique. You have to add on to those thoughts that you laid above by providing us rich sensory clues that allow us to see, hear, taste, smell, and touch the power of Jesus, in some form or another.

Is this hard? YES. But if you can pull this off, you can come up with a truly inspirational poem that can stand up to the test of time.

With that said, I want to share a Jesus poem that I have always loved. It's called "Footprints in the Sand." You've probably heard of it before, but if you haven't, then I'm sure you can enjoy it. ^_^

Footprints in the Sand

One night I dreamed I was walking along the beach with the Lord. Many scenes from my life flashed across the sky.

In each scene I noticed footprints in the sand. Sometimes there were two sets of footprints, other times there was one only.

This bothered me because I noticed that during the low periods of my life, when I was suffering from anguish, sorrow or defeat, I could see only one set of footprints, so I said to the Lord,

“You promised me Lord,
that if I followed you, you would walk with me always. But I have noticed that during the most trying periods of my life there has only been one set of footprints in the sand. Why, when I needed you most, have you not been there for me?”

The Lord replied, “The years when you have seen only one set of footprints, my child, is when I carried you.”



Mary Stevenson, 1936


So remember: don't just tell us about why Jesus is so great. Show us. Sell your poem to us and we shall be inspired.

Tweak it up a little bit and let us see the final version, 'kay? I always liked inspirational poems better than suicide ones. ^_^
Ubi caritas est vera, Deus ibi est.

"The mark of your ignorance is the depth of your belief in injustice and tragedy. What the caterpillar calls the end of the world, the Master calls the butterfly." ~ Richard Bach

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kindaza plain for such a powerful topic.

but it def gets the message across.

nice work, easy to read.



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