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If you want your writing torn apart, I'm available to do reviews for you under these conditions:

•No swearing or crude jokes
•No mature content
•No excessive violence (i.e. repeated stabs and whatnot)
•Don't complain to me if I don't review for a few days; I have a life
•If it's been a week, I may have forgotten, so you can pm me a reminder if you're concerned

I review poetry, chapters, and shorts. No essays, articles, or scripts. Reply to this or PM me if you would like me to review your work!
Last edited by ElvenJedi on Sat Jan 07, 2017 3:40 am, edited 1 time in total.
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hey, would you kindly look into this for me kaiego, first few pages




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Sure! I'm kinda busy these next few days, getting back into school and more parties and whatnot but I'll try my best to find time asap! I read through your work and really enjoyed it.

I'll write a review soon, but it will not really cover grammatical and spelling errors. If you would like, I can PM you a copy of the edited version (with the changes pointed out and in red font so you know what is changed) with those mistakes corrected, without changing anything but the grammatical and spelling errors.

So would you like the revised version, the overall review, or both?
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I am looking primarily for narrative critique as opposed to grammatical errors and such, as those are aspects that I am capable of going through and correcting on my own time. If possible, perhaps you may read the three chapters that come after, which are already uploaded.

The Carpenter - Exordium of Shattered Crowns




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I would, but your work has been rated for mature content and language, so I assume you didn't read my reviewing conditions. So sorry!
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That's fine. First chapter has no violence or swearing though.




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Follow The Shining Stars

A review on this would be great, thank you!
I bought a cactus. A week later it died. I got depressed because I thought Damn, I am less nurturing than a desert.
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Hello!
Could you please take a look at the first chapter of my novel Axylia? It's a fantasy about a Fae girl who is raised in the human city of Kelir, but is forced to flee for fear of persecution.
Thanks in advance!




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Hey there, ElvenJedi! I'm Alex, a Resources/Community moderator on YWS.

This is a message just to let you know that I have locked and archived this thread due to inactivity (of more than two years). We do this to keep the forum organized and make it more likely for the writers and poets to get the feedback they seek. If you'd like to reopen this thread at any point in the future, please contact me or any other resources moderator and we'd be more than happy to reopen it for you! Thank you for volunteer service to reviewing so far, we really appreciate it.

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