The Writer's Task

Creatures die and countries fall

A hero fights to save it all.

Worlds begin and others end,

So many others to defend.

Creatures live and countries thrive

I am witness, I am scribe.

I like it. do you have a title? It reminds me of history and I love history, so that's a good thing.

Aw! I automatically love any short poem that has something to do with write.

Very cool poem, short and sweet. Last Mohican, right? Like Hawkeye?

I liked the poem. The only thing i saw that bugged me was that in the last two lines you stopped the rhyming which kind of throws it off. Good job though.

I really like it. Short and simple, but it gets it's point across very well.
Yeah. I don't really have anyhthing to say that others haven't.
Nice work.

i really, really suck at rhyming, so i can't offer any suggestions... but please do get the last two lines to rhyme. it really threw me. otherwise, i love it.

I liked this, mainly because it was short...

I absolutely hate the title though... lol. But I can't talk, I'm crap at title making.

Anyway,
here goes...

What I liked:

"Worlds begin and others end,

So many others to defend. "

I like your use of rhyming here,
its good.

What I didn't like:

"others"
you had this word repeated... it just jutted out a bit thats all.

I loved it.

This is going to be printed out and stuck up on my wall

lexy xxx