Queen of October

I step outside
Into the still bright twilight
The air with a bit of chill, beginning to descend
And starting to turn crisp.
I breathe deeply, and look to the sky,
She's coming.

I would leave the "And" out, to make it flow better, also saying "She's" is easier to say than "She is"

The rain that falls
Is icy, yet soft
Mist begins to creep
Eerily along the cold, hard ground,
The leaves begin to shrivel with fear, in their death dance,
She's coming, and fast.

What's Earily? might you mean "Early"? And quite long sentence there, try shorten it a little and look out for punctuation. Also here, "She's"

She flies over everything
With her brisk breezes
And sharp, clear smelling air
She paints the sky
Brilliant shades of yellow, orange, red, and pink,
She's coming, and will be here soon.

Very nice imagary but what exactly do you mean here ? Does she paint the sky with clear smelling air ? Same with "She's" as well.

She is in the changing colors of the leaves
In the smell that fills the air as they burn,
In the way they dry, and drift to the ground,
She is in the setting of the chilly sun
And in the spirits that lurk in every wood and hollow,
The queen is coming

And there is no way to hide from her.

To me, "No way" sounds better than "no where" but that's just me
Nice closure, no more comments here I really really like you're usage of "she's coming, will be here soon etc. etc."