~nariel~

Hey guys, thanks for the comments. I was shocked to see so many. About the stabbing thing. Originally, Chris would have stabbed Lauren in the end, but it was too ...

Hey, thanks for your feedback Meep. You were right about the whole stabbing thing. It does seem a bit rushed. So I edited a few things, hopefully, for the better. ...

*smacks head* Oh my gosh! I'm sorry! I must have looked over that. Yes, you're right. James does knock her over. Oops. :oops: Keep up the good work then. Sorry ...

So much better. Thanks for editing. It drew me in right from the beginning and it made me want to continue reading. I was disappointed when it ended. "I'm sorry, ...

*Looks confused* Huh? I didn't really see anything similar except a couple of things. You should continue writing. Don't worry about 'stealing' ideas. I'll tell you when that happens. :) ...

Thanks Dreami. Your advice was awesome. I didn't want a prologue, but I couldn't think of any way to weave the history about the different countries and stuff into my ...

Sorry, I had another comment. :) I missed this earlier, but you said that Ayra will be maddened by the man's blood because she hasn't hunted for so long. I ...