~Excalibur~

You do a lot of telling and not showing. You should try to fix up as much of this as possible so that the reader doesn't feel like they are ...

Definitely too wordy in descriptions, but the whole 'purple prose' issue is not entirely do to word choice, but rather flow. Using metaphors to describe something is a really good ...

Prologue (edited) The summer night was hauntingly still. Nothing moved, not even the leaves covering the surrounding trees. A thin, mournful howl suddenly split the air, piercing through the silence ...

I haven't read other pieces, but I figured since this is a piece of it, might as well provide some help. First paragraph. Doctor’s should be Doctors. It is not ...